Running down the street screaming
in your constant state of rage
blaming everyone for your life, your lies.
Everyone but yourself.
I long for gravity to take you down
envision asphalt pulling at your skin
curling it over into pinkness
as beads of blood rise to the surface.
Red beads. the same as mine
the same as us all
Painting over your tired excuses
Stealing away your screaming rants
leaving you to look at yourself
finally.
leaving me with silence
finally.
Please tell me what you think
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Awesome !
This is an awesome write. One suggestion: this line disrupts flow..blaming everyone for your life. for your lies. blaming everyone for your life. for your lies. Try.. blaming everyone for your life and lies.
Now, these are only suggestions. You can use them or not. Afterall, it is your piece..
Blessings.. Debby
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No, Your suggestions are right on. Besides, this one was an easy fix - no he/she's
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Yup..better !!
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