Falling head over heels,
Until I fall too deep.
It all comes crashing down around me,
Please tell me I'm asleep.
No, I'm in Wonderland.
Where nothing is quite what it seems.
Lost in confusion,
A black hole of despair.
Wondering why I am here,
And not over there.
A world of anger, happiness, and love,
Tip-toeing around a place of happy,
Yet confusing, unwanted memories.
Wondering what is real,
What is the big deal?
Who are these people who pretend to know me,
What is this all meant to be?
A frustration with communication,
Lost in confusion and translation.
Chasing a lost cause,
I stop and pause.
The clock is ticking.
Until I hear you call,
'I'm late, I'm late, for a very important date',
Or is this all just meant to be fate?
And then I'm left to reason with the Queen of Hearts,
Telling her that my life is in parts.
Fed up of playing your silly game,
It all seems so very lame.
Will the Queen of Hearts ever get what she missies?
Or is it all just a life time of wishes?
Author notes
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This is a poem I have created for a piece of my univerity artwork. I have scenes with the characters from Alice in Wonderland. As this poem is about my life right now, and me relating it to the story of Alice in Wonderland for my piece of artwork.
Its about me falling in love and how Im now confussed, and feeling lost without the one I love; the White Rabbit, and how I want him to come running back to me, but Im not sure if he will and if he does if i can stand waiting round for him, and if i can take him back after what hes done. I also talk about how I feel let down by my crazy friends, who seem like they're in another world from me most of the time, i find it frustrating how im always there for them im always reliable and their not, they dont seem to care. And the bit about the queen of heart, is about me having to deal with my feelings for the one I love if he ever decides to return to me.
Anyway thats the poem.
Jules
A contest entry
- It's all about the mystery, life is! by S2ndQueen.
450 points, ended April 20, 2007, 35 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I like it, but I would only use confusion once, and not 3 times like you did here. just replace them with different words that describe this empty void. Wow, remember when Alice and Wonderland was on the DIsney Channel? I am going to youtube that now.
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i got drawn into this poem by its title, but as a whole i really do like it. it has a really good emotional tone to it. kudos to you.
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it's very very nice! thanks for the comment by the way. =] and i loved the idea of mixing Alice in Wonderland within your poem. well, that could just be becuase i love Alice in Wonderland. i'm such a little kid. i know...hehe...
anyway, it was very flowing with ideas and i can totally feel emotions rippling through your words. you rhymed throughout just in different places. like sometimes, you'd rhmye consecutive lines while others you would skip a line then rhyme. it made the peom a little different and kind of cool that way but in the places you didnt rhyme, it seemed almost out of place.
other than that, great job!
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I checked out the picutre in the link and I think this writing makes a decent compain piece. You struggle a little bit with the theme, especially in the end, however. The work does not have to stay permanent (and pervasively) connected to Alice in Wonderland throughout. In fact, the less so after the inital point is made, the better. The way it is it harms the originality and that is a shame.
Best wishes in your future works.
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this seems to apply to many situations in life , for don't we always somehow question that which is real and that which is not. Decisions to make without regret? yet there is never any re-assurance that it will be the right one...and then after we made it , we still wonder. I think you did a great job with the "wonderland comparison" where nothing is what it seems...or so it seems
reenie
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Wondering what is real, What is the big deal
sometimes life can feel just like a childs fairy tail...we can get where we dont know where the real starts and the unreal beginningsthank you for shareing
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