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Insanity

His apathetic caress
Inflames my senses
A dull purple haze
Blinds me
Mouth dry,
Tongue limp
I lie there
Voices invade
My mind,
Speakers unknown
Photographs of memory
Haunt me
His all but gentle
Touch
Revives me from my
Insanity
I wake to see
My crowned king,
Holding out a red
Rose

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  • GoodKnightPoet
    May 10, 2007

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    I like this poem a lot. You chose an excellent way of expressing yourself. Keep up the good work. I know you will.


  • XxMysticalFantasyxX
    April 27, 2007

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    nice really nice this is a really great poem....I really enjoyed reading it and I can so relate to this sometimes..anyways take care and the best of luck in this contest...great write!


  • pointlessdayz
    April 4, 2007

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    this was awesome! The only thing I noticed was that you used the word speaker differently than I had intended. I meant it to be used like a spesker in your computer, or car, but this way works too! You dont have to change it. Thanks for entering!

    -alex


    • travis34dietC
      April 5, 2007
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      thanks! i never even thought to use speaker like that. sorry it wasn't exactly what you wanted
      ~sara


  • Dalawa
    April 4, 2007

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    Awesome

    I love this. The imagery is really good. You know, I was wondering if you were writing about your own experiences at one point (the "voices invade my mind" part) Not that I'm saying you're crazy. Cuz you're not. I also love the last four lines. They finish up the poem nicely. Great job! (as always )


    • travis34dietC
      April 5, 2007

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      the voices could be the indian chanting medecine!
      glad you liked it! as you can see, i go slightly crazy during phy/chi..
      ~sara


  • A Leper Messiah
    April 3, 2007

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    Very good piece. The imagery was off the heezy! lol
    Anyway great job as usual.
    Good luck in the contest!


  • Drac
    April 3, 2007

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    Wow! Another great poem Sara!
    I can't see how you do it =)
    This did remind me a bit of insanity, but I truly loved the last lines (Reminded me of another poem by you)... Extremely well written as always!
    Good job, and good luck in the contest!

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