It all started
When he was a kid
He's 16 now
And still don't
Realize who he is
His mother abused him
he's still not ready for this
The moment has come
He's about to tell her
Who he is
16, wow
What a magical number
I bet you was saying that
While beating my brother
Your not my mother
Your a magical figure
A magical Hitler
Who abuse her children
A magical crazy mother
Who shouldn't be living
I bet my dollar bill
That you don't even know me
And even if you did you'll still abuse me
I hope my words are getting though that head
Because what hurts me the most is I wish you were dead
12 hits across the face
I was wishing for more
I was hoping for a knife
I'll say no more
But it's pretty bad
That your children hates you
Pretty bad
When your mother abuse you
Pretty bad
That know-one loves you
Pretty bad
That I still don't hit you
But instead I was wishing more
Wishing that a knife was in your hand
Wishing to leave earth with all I had
"Be gone and disappear"
Because that was what I was thinking
When you you appeared
Leaving earth
What a powerful expression
Your not even listing
To this composition
Pay me respect
And you better
Listen
Because these aren't words
THERE MY EMOTIONS!!!!
I'M YELLING NOW
AT THE TOP OF MY LUNGS
I HATE YOU MOM
FOR WHAT YOU HAVE DONE
And now that my anger has cooled down
I leave with but a word and a sound
Just remember these things
I'll give you till the count of three
I'll play fair unlike you did to me
I'll give you a chance to get out of my life
I'll give you a chance to
Run away and hide
Author notes
About what my mom did and abused me...this happened 4 days ago and still makes me cry a night that such a thing could happen...
dragontuba..also know as Stephen Arthur Zogal
A contest entry
- The Eye of the Storm by Lyrical Rain.
1800 points, ended June 21, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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AWW!
i am so sorry that you are being abused by your mom like this! it was truely a harsh and dark write! it made me want to cry! this was really raw with emotions... your angst was just pouring uncontrollably! this was overflowing with such deep emotions! once again, i'm so sorry that this has to happen to you, i felt the pain while reading every line! 
you're simple amazing in portraying your feeling you know... keep writing kays! 
with much love
~RANJI
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I know this must be hard for you and you did an excellent job at expressing yourself. This was an excellently detailed piece and with so much emotion involved I cant judge you off of grammar or spelling because I too have been caught up in my emotions and have just written my poor heart out. If you read some of my poetry you will find that I have been abused just like you and I'm here to tell you that there's a way other than death that can heal your wounds. Look to Jesus Christ the author and the finisher of your faith and I promise you things will get better. Peace and Love. Lyrical Rain
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G'day dragontuba
I am sorry you had to endure this from your Mother. It is horrible when parents abuse their children. It is even 'annoying' that believe that only men abuse woman and daughters.
Men and sons suffer as well
Amazing write hun
Stay safe
~Amanda
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wow i can't imagine to have felt this way about my mother we've alway been close, so i know you must be in pain i'm so sorry, and i'll pray that one day it'll get better!
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This is very sad and touching and i do hope that thngs get better for you.
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Very emotional poem here, I loved it. I liked the rythym too, the sadness in it. I can relate to the hurt of her lost love and the hate and anger to her for her abuse.
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you can tell its a verse. or a rap, whichever you prefer. good flow, nice emotions... keep it up!!
KK
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I love you, more then anything.
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*shock*
My heart goes out to you and I don't know how it feels to be in your situation, but I've heard a lot about it. I'm so sorry you are having to endure such pain...mentally and physically. Not sure about where u live, but something CAN be done about what is happeing to you. Stay strong my friend, and please talk to someone b4 it's too late.
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PS - The applauses are for having the courage to stand up and say something...this is a sensitive situation and I am glad you are opening up...helps to relieve the mind and soul...inner you.
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OMG! So Sad
Awwwwww I can't imagine treating my children like this,you have penned some raw emotions here sweetie.I am sorry that this happened to you.My heart just ached as I read this.You stand strong sweetie and don't let anything tear you down.Pray and stay safe.If you need anything you just message me...
Blessings
Your friend in Arkansas
~Cheryl~
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omg... this is so powerful, the emotion really touched me... i'm so sorry, let me know if there's anything i can do, k?
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No,, I let all my emotions out on to the paper instead of on my mom...but thank you for asking It means alot to me..I already spoken to DHS..
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maybe you should talk to your mom... at a time when she's in a good mood, or something...
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THis is a very sad and emotional write dear poet, well written I can feel the emotion as I was reading this
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Thank you for the comment...
Best Of Wishes
dragontuba
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oh my goodness. i am in a situation here. i want you to know that there is hope of surviving. i am not a counselor nor do i pretend to be. i can say i am a person who has been there and that i found safety in talking to someone outside of my home. can you write about what you would like to see other than what reality is for you at the moment. like a dream of when you are not in this situation any longer. the poem is very emotional and touched me. the problem for this contest is that i want to focus on surviving and not on what happened. what gave you the strength when you were dealing with this? one thing i do want to say is that violence meeting violence is not the answer. my email is on my author page if you want to talk further but remember, i am not a counselor nor do i have the answers you need other than to say if it were one of my children's friends writing this i would suggest talking to a teacher, principal, counselor, or someone at church if you go. viyanna rosemarie
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can you please add your name to the author comment box. sorry, i just added that to the contest page.
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Ok...thank you,,,Can you tell me what you think of the poem..I could use the help at the moment...
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This is so sad and tragic! My heart goes out to you in hopes that I can make a difference with my words and let you know you are not alone but surrounded by love here. Your writing style is powerful...keep up the good work! I hope to read more from you...smiles, Terry
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So sad
Beleive it not, I can identify with this in my own youth. It shouldn't have to be. I'm sad for you. This is not the way a real mother acts. And sometimes though a few would make you think you have no right to your feelings, it is better to be honest. You're poem is drenched with pain, real pain. The kind that leaps off the page at the reader. Hopefully time will help to at least heal some of the wounds.
You said what was really burning inside. That is always the source of memorable poems.
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That happened,,satday...its been about 4 days and I called 911 when it happened and you know what she said, "go ahead call 911 you can't prove nothing, I left no mark on you" but the thing was that my sisters was there when it happened so now the police called DHS and because of the other chlid abuse reports I could be taken to a differnt home....
sometimes I just have to let my emotions flow on the page...and I still have to put up with the deppression that follows... -
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I hope you do get a chance to start over. And you know, the best way you can cope is to understand it isn't your fault. Forgiveness of self is so important. Plus when the time comes, if you have kids of your own, you can give them love instead of abuse. That is the greatest revenge.
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Thank you for the support,, right now I really apprecitate it..I can not express my thanks to you...
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It was my pleasure to help. I hope the future truly brings you new life and hope.
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