Demise
My body lies
in solitude.
Clinging to life
I take my last breath.
Forgive me, my love
for leaving you behind.
One last time
I whisper your name.
As I make this one
sweet sacrifice for you.
I feel my body
going under.
Slipping....
Farther away from life.
Give unto me
just one last kiss
before my immortal
soul arrises to
meet judgement.
As I lay in this
field of innocence,
even in death
you are the only one
I will love.
Finally....
I breathe no more,
and have become
nothing more than
a haunted memory.
As my star deminishes
your star still shines bright.
With darkness
taking over me,
the ascension of spirit
into eternal life.
It is written....
Bring me to life
with my own demise.
I love you more
than life itself.
Cry not for me
as I will be anywhere
that you are.
So close....
and yet, so far.
Author notes
Amy Lee is my idol
First of all, I only wrote this inspired by the titles listed below and have no intentions of killing myself, nor does this have any other kind of meaning.
Titles that I used:
So Close
Solitude
Ascension of Spirit
Give Unto Me
Eternal
Lies
Anywhere
Even In Death
Field of Innocence
Your Star
The Only One
Sweet Sacrifice
Breathe No More
Farther Away
Whisper
My Last Breath
Taking Over Me
Haunted
My Immortal
Bring Me To Life
Going Under
I also used 2 titles that were not listed;
Forgive Me and Demise
In a list
A contest entry
- ♥ Evanescence!!!! ♥ by requiempoet.
365 points, ended April 20, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love it so much! You really have a good one here that has gold written all over it. Its amazing so haunting and sad. Great poem! Best of luck in the contest.
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I figured that most people didn't know Forgive me and Demise, it's great that you have a Evanescence inspired list! that makes me so happy!! I only ask that you put in your author box Amy Lee is my hero!! Wonderful write!!!!
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this was well written see now i think i need to pull out that cd, but this is a great poem you did a kick ass job on it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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this was totally awesome!... i loved the context, flow, and it was just excellent...peace and harmony...desi
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Good.
I also caught the subtle Metallica allusion at the end there. . . And ironically, I am listening to "One" (S&M version). At first, this piece reminded me of a firefighter or an office worker, just SOMEONE who perished in the 9/11 massacre. I was also reminded of a story that someone once told me about a mother and daughter trapped under tons of rubble, with shards of glass nearby. The mother, recognizing that her they are both dying of thirst (they have been trapped there for several days,) grabs a shard of glass and slices herself to let her daughter drink the blood.
Then I got to the "fields of innocence" part and realized that that particular phrase would probably not be used in reference to the 9/11 rubble. I was sort of reminded of Elusyian (sp?) fields then, along with the scene of Van Gogh's death, which he painted before he died, which actually kind of fits here. Finally, I gazed upon the whole, lonely (yet beautifully portrayed) picture and I was amazed. I don't even really like Evanescence, but this was friggin' awesome.
~James
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