Where you thinking that the blusher
hid the pallour of your cheeks?
That the Valentine you bought for glitter
would last long than two weeks?
Did you think the pain from stilletos
was for a worthy cause?
Did you think you could stop the bleeding?
or use cyanide for gauze?
When your artery is severed
by the rosary made cross
And your habit leads to a habit
and his necktie leaves you lost
Did the trigger feel too small for
your sitck-on nails to find?
Did the Meth leave you Methelated
and the mascara leave you blind?
Did the preist become your love affair
did you find yourself in faith?
or did you find the virgin choir boy
and the larger sum they paid?
Did your sillicone disagree
with the holy candle's flame?
Or did you finally find than unknown look
that the catwalks gave no name?
Author notes
This is like stab at the girl who keeps ocming onto my boyfriend! complete slapper I hate her.
The unknown look - Shame!
A contest entry
- Candy Coated Lies by BeautifulDisaster9.
525 points, ended July 12, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - && I'd rather have a b r u i s e d pelvis;; than a //sha tte red\\ ♥ by PaintedParisPassion.
500 points, ended July 19, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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WOW... That's seriously really great...
Keep it up
Did the trigger feel too small for
your sitck-on nails to find?
Did the Meth leave you Methelated
and the mascara leave you blind?
Fave part... YAY!
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THis is nice....love the flow...and hate girls like that too BUT....this is not what I wanted for this contest...I really do like this and I can tell you have skills when it come to poetry and using poetic devices...its just I wanted a poem dealing with political and social problems...
So I'm gonna DQ it babe...I love it...just not what I wanted for this contest...but your free to enter something else
Thanks
B
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Amazing
Woah,i really like it.it's true,there are people in the world like that.I HATE them!!!!!! keep up the fabulous work! -
oh wow, i liked the poem, but you didnt follow the rules. please fix this problem, because i really dont want to have to DQ this. thanks bbydoll.
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Whoa. Love the rhyme scheme. Very strong emotion here.
Love it love it love it.
Thanks doll.
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Wow really great. It made me think just enough, and I liked it (besides...I didn't want to think a lot...I'm tired. Haha.) Anyway, I like the ryhme and the wording. Thanks for sharing with the group!
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This is beautiful!!! I like this whole write of this! You kept me reading and wanting the next line! Nice job!
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The rhyme was good in this and the questions that you asked in it were very good
It could have made me think a bit more, but it was really good. I did like the theme, it was interesting to read
But I think it needs a better title!
All in all I loved it
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So cynical, and somewhat confusing...a little hard to follow in places, but well worded and the rhyming works beautifully, it doesn't seem forced at all. Great write.
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Really beautiful. I love it. It conveys a lot of hatred and cynical emotion. Very wonderful. Great write.
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this is beautifuL!
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