Dear Lord,
Remember when I was little
and I broke my mothers glass
I was afraid my dad would shout at me
and you stopped him when I asked.
Remember when my doggy died
and I said I hated you
I knew that you'd be there for me
when the fog I'd beaten through.
Remember when my was younger
and confused by all my peers
I shunned you firstly in my boast
then came back with added years.
Remember all the tims I asked
you to be at my mothers side
through every operation
its my turn this time.
I've asked alot of you my lord
over all the years
but I hope you won't mind this one
as I ask to calm my fears.
As the fearful date approaches
my heart beats wildy fast
protect me in my aneastetic
it's a big old thing to ask.
Amen.
Author notes
Basically, i'm going to have an operation in two and half weeks time and i'm really scared.
Sometimes I feel like I ask so much, why should I ask for this, when there are people in the world dying from hunger and in pain. I knwo I'm safe in the doctors hands and I shouldn't be scared but for me, it feels like such a big thing!
Option 3 and a little of 5
My name is Victoria Aka Vashman
A contest entry
- just a link in the chain by FindingFate.
600 points, ended April 16, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I understand that people write religious poetry because their relationship with God is very woven. And I'm sure that the emotion behind this is real, but it unfortunately doesn't come through the way I think you intended in the poem. Congratulations on your gold trophy, but it's not what I'm looking for in this contest.
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Lovely and uplifting
You are in the company of prayer warriors who will pray you through this frightening time. I totally understand as they want me to have surgery and I am too afraid to have it done. I will stand in the room with you and hold your hand. Just reach out for me.
hugs Wolfie
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Wow... if there is one thing that I am totally afraid of in this world, it is surgery... I'll definately keep you in my prayers, because even though medical science can do great things, too many people find their end on those cold steel tables...
As for the poem, I think that it's really good. I like the form and the flow... it's really well done. I wish you all of the best in the competition. Zach.
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