I hear that you are completely mad, drawn to darkness by loathing your flesh.
Violent beyond most fears, and that I should be in danger now.
I stand by your side as bewitched by your spirit as I've ever been in life.
As curious as a delicate kitten in a stranger's trembling grasp.
I'll never forget the day when my fingers quaked as I removed your mask.
I have seen your face behind the plastic facade.
Seen the deformed exterior you endure daily.
Yet found that visage to be less traumatizing than they say.
I have seen you cower as my gaze grazed your skin.
And rant upon it application, in your vulnerability.
I have fallen in you're outraged presence.
Fallen in love with a desperate, powerful, gargoyle.
I saw the chills race through your being as I stood by you that night.
Amazed when I stepped in closer towards your stony statue self.
Thrills and confusion pulsed in your soul, but you were steady.
And I , enchanted by your mysterious charms, was quite dazed.
Entranced, but yet aware, my fragile hand caressed your face.
Your soul melted at my touch, and your hands held my wrist.
Then I gently pressed my lips against your raw cheek.
Showing you how amber lips can weaken strong stone.
And tears flowed down our faces, as we embraced.
Then back to a passionate, dangerous, strengthened man.
As I handed you that empowering comfort cover.
You held me night after night in that mask.
Knowing I had broken down your fears, and showed you
Love that you had not felt in years.
A contest entry
- Let Your Imagination Run Free #9 (Picture Contest) by Aussie Gypsy.
500 points, ended April 23, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - even the wicked can love occasionally by unraveled.
450 points, ended July 21, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very interesting, and good imagery. this reminds me of the movie "v for vendetta" on a different pathway. my favorite line is "i have seen your face behind the plastic facade." my only suggestion for this would be to split the lines so they are half as long, but the poem is twice as long, because it is more distracting to read long lines, and harder to absorb. also a small suggestion- it might be better in line 4 to switch from simile to metaphor- "A delicate kitten in a stranger's trembling grasp, i'll never forget..." thank you for entering,
<3cassidy -
This is an amazingly beautiful and deeply intense work. Thank you so much for this entry in my contest it is really really fantastic.
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Wow this one drew me in from beginning to end, what wonderful powerful writing here, well done
Thanks for taking the time to enter, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
First thing, I adore the title. It really caught my interest, and second, this has amazing emotion and word use.
"Entranced, but yet aware, my fragile hand caressed your face.
Your soul melted at my touch, and your hands held my wrist."
I love that line :]
fantastic job!
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This is powerful... You've created some strong images, and you use a nice range of vocabulary. This is excellent. I wish you all the best of luck in the contest, Zach
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