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(contradicting)

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Camomile as tea
              cautious as a lemming
(contradicting…)

Tip-toe prints in fine sand
visible 

       as a black kite at nightfall,
and
significant
            like the grains
clutching to my smooth skin,
heeding a skipping

               escape.

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In brief it's about life, nature, the world around, and everything under the sun....
I'd love to know each individual readers interpretation and thoughts...thanks...



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  • zappa gold member
    April 23, 2007

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    It's like being a part of a whole and blending in even though the initial instinct is to stand out but can't no matter how much one tries.


  • leander Moderators member
    April 23, 2007

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    The first two lines of this poem are indeed contradicting, but what a smart use of alliteration there. I'm defintely going through your works as much as I can, but I'm losing vocabulary here and I don't want to sound redundant


  • Wesley Storer
    April 14, 2007

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    I love Tea! I love the land of Tea Tephi! I am so glad to make your acquaintance, English girl, only 18 glorious years old. I am 62! Please say hello if you have time!


  • WriteOrWrong597
    April 7, 2007

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    I thought this was interesting. Abstract, it made me think a lot. Thank you for adding the author's comments, since I'm not too great at interpreting things myself.


  • MistressAkasha
    April 4, 2007

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    i think its a poem that is strong but strong.......how you say that short but sweet? thats what this poem says to me. i loved the wording and the emphasize and some of the words. i like how you add a picture and i think it was good luck finding such a good picture for your poem. it seem to tie it all together.
    my favorite line was the the tip-toeing line it seem to have the best imagery and it seem to open your poem beautifully.
    great job!


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    Mass migrations, following the leader to one's death; as insignificant as a grain of sand - is that all there is to life? Can't get away from it no how!


  • Dark Whispers
    April 4, 2007

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    what The reference to "lemming " I don't really get that park most of all. this poem is a little weird if it wasn't for your author box wqouldn't know what this poem is even about. Just trying to help.
    Please return the favor I would apriciate it.


  • Dalawa
    April 3, 2007
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    wow...

    Love it. It conveyed a calm, peaceful atmosphere... At first I didn't quite understand, because I didn't put together the details about nature. But when I read the poem a second time, it all came together. That's another reason why it's so good: I like poems that make me think a little bit.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    April 3, 2007
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    What comes around goes around and nothing stays the same...Each can have its equal yet be totally different...Like the grains clutching to my smooth skin, heeding a skipping escape.As always the night follows the day...VERY WELL THOUGHT OUT!!! Thank you for shareing...


  • RedAquarius
    April 3, 2007
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    I don't get the lemming reference at all - I thought lemmings were the critters that will follow each other off cliffs (doesn't show caution to me! LOL)...Other than that, I like the rest, very abstract and open to taking one down different thought processes each time it is read.


  • paintitblack1001
    April 3, 2007
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    i like it, short and sweet right to the point. keep up the great work


  • sans-amour
    April 3, 2007

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    Interesting image, and a short, but powerful poem accompaning. Very abstract and very nice. I wish you all the best, Zach.


  • cactus thorn
    April 3, 2007
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    Oh, nice!
    I like this.
    Very, very good.

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