(contradicting) by silverscent at All poetry

Camomile as tea
cautious as a lemming
(contradicting…)

Tip-toe prints in fine sand
visible

as a black kite at nightfall,
and significant
like the grains
clutching to my smooth skin,
heeding a skipping

escape.

Author notes

In brief it's about life, nature, the world around, and everything under the sun....
I'd love to know each individual readers interpretation and thoughts...thanks...

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zappa
April 23, 2007

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It's like being a part of a whole and blending in even though the initial instinct is to stand out but can't no matter how much one tries.
leander
April 23, 2007

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The first two lines of this poem are indeed contradicting, but what a smart use of alliteration there. I'm defintely going through your works as much as I can, but I'm losing vocabulary here and I don't want to sound redundant
Wesley Storer
April 14, 2007

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I love Tea! I love the land of Tea Tephi! I am so glad to make your acquaintance, English girl, only 18 glorious years old. I am 62! Please say hello if you have time!
WriteOrWrong597
April 7, 2007

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I thought this was interesting. Abstract, it made me think a lot. Thank you for adding the author's comments, since I'm not too great at interpreting things myself.
MistressAkasha
April 4, 2007

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i think its a poem that is strong but strong.......how you say that short but sweet? thats what this poem says to me. i loved the wording and the emphasize and some of the words. i like how you add a picture and i think it was good luck finding such a good picture for your poem. it seem to tie it all together.
my favorite line was the the tip-toeing line it seem to have the best imagery and it seem to open your poem beautifully.
great job!
grannyeri
April 4, 2007

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Mass migrations, following the leader to one's death; as insignificant as a grain of sand - is that all there is to life? Can't get away from it no how!
Dark Whispers
April 4, 2007

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what The reference to "lemming " I don't really get that park most of all. this poem is a little weird if it wasn't for your author box wqouldn't know what this poem is even about. Just trying to help.
Please return the favor I would apriciate it.
Dalawa
April 3, 2007
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wow...
Love it. It conveyed a calm, peaceful atmosphere... At first I didn't quite understand, because I didn't put together the details about nature. But when I read the poem a second time, it all came together. That's another reason why it's so good: I like poems that make me think a little bit.
Whispering Wind
April 3, 2007
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What comes around goes around and nothing stays the same...Each can have its equal yet be totally different...Like the grains clutching to my smooth skin, heeding a skipping escape.As always the night follows the day...VERY WELL THOUGHT OUT!!! Thank you for shareing...
RedAquarius
April 3, 2007
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I don't get the lemming reference at all - I thought lemmings were the critters that will follow each other off cliffs (doesn't show caution to me! LOL)...Other than that, I like the rest, very abstract and open to taking one down different thought processes each time it is read.
paintitblack1001
April 3, 2007
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i like it, short and sweet right to the point. keep up the great work
sans-amour
April 3, 2007

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Interesting image, and a short, but powerful poem accompaning. Very abstract and very nice. I wish you all the best, Zach.
cactus thorn
April 3, 2007
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Oh, nice!
I like this.
Very, very good.