in cool water
these graceful koi
orange
white
spotted
swim leisurely
lily pads
and algae
wave in the
gentle
ripples
the pond
is peaceful
and still
A contest entry
- Koi Pond. by Poetic Aphrodite.
400 points, ended April 6, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do you like or hate that I said 'ripples' and then 'still'?
Comments
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Great work, here. You've got a fantastic hold on imagery and the use thereof.
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This is so Zen and calming and peaceful. I love how relaxed I feel as soon as I finished reading it. I love reading things as serene as this, it's very comferting.
Keep Writing
~~Meri~~ -
Thankyou for your beautiful entry, Bella
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Breathtaking
This is a beautiful poem, so calm and peaceful. I can set back and close my eyes and picture this pond. My heartrate is slowing down and my breathing becomes slower and deeper. Hypnotizing Best wishes in the contest, this is a winner in my book!
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