Crying & Bleeding,
Arms Open And Screaming,
As The Blade Lays By You On The Floor,
[When Did Your Life Fall Apart]
Blackened Eyes,
Hollow Lies,
[Baby What Pain Are You Trying To Hide]
Your Walls Went Up,
As The Cuts Got Deeper,
[Let Me Help You]
This Escape Of Yours,
Is Nothing But A Death Sentence,
A Pile Of Locked Chains Holding You Down,
[Let Me Unlock Them For You]
But You've Driven Me So Far Away,
With Every Cut & Every Tear,
You've Driven Me To My Worst Fears,
[Let Me Love You]
Let Me Erase All Your Cuts,
And Cover Up The Scarring,
All The pain You've Inflicted On Yourself,
[I Want To Heal You Again]
Let My Love Replace The Cuts,
My Hugs Be The Blood,
[They Will Never Stop Coming]
And My Kisses Be Your Tears
[They Will Always Keep Coming]
The More You Try To Bleed,
The More I Try To Hold You,
[I Will Never Let You]
You Mean The World To Me,
And The Cuts I Hate To See,
[Let Me Fade Them All Away]
Author notes
♥ Broken Hearts ♥ (A Contest For My Birthday)
Option 4 Cutting
Your Gonna Wannna Use Those Unlimited Entries
option 14 Cutting
A contest entry
- ♥ Broken Hearts ♥ (A Contest For My Birthday) by Bruised.Roses.
450 points, ended April 16, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Gonna Wannna Use Those Unlimited Entries by TWiSTEDxCUPCAKE.
700 points, ended April 22, 2007, 66 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lets Slit Our Wrists To Perfection by ShotgunGoddess.
1500 points, ended April 21, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *L.o.s.t, H.u.r.t.&&C.o.n.f.u.s.e.d* by Logans-Mommy.
500 points, ended August 2, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites by February Moon.
1750 points, ended July 31, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the silver and bronze you won with this poem. Though I am no great fan of dirty pretty, this was pretty well written. Thank you for entering, and good luck.
Chelsea
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yea you earned those trophies, cause damn this one is good.
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Congrats on the trophies. You deserved them. This is very sad. I know that feeling of wanting to be there for someone with a problem like this, but they push you away because they want to deal with it themselves. Very strong write. Good job.
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O.o
I love this poem...it is really really really really fantastic
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this poem is so beautiful the way you want to help someone's pain. its so sad the way people cut themselves.
i love the lines
Crying & Bleeding,
Arms Open And Screaming,
As The Blade Lays By You On The Floor,
[When Did Your Life Fall Apart] -
Wow
keep up the Good work, lady Ashley -
Beautiful
This was a amazing write congrates on it, your a great writer i love to read more of your work
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wow... what a beautiful poem! I loved it.
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Awwww just so sweet and beautiful, the heart that you're willing to give, to feel inside their chest, caring and helping them to heal, the broken and the wounded.....
It's like a song for me too,
antonio
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How beautiful!! This is so lovely how you wanted to heal all of this person's hurt and pain. And I though that it was interesting how you said
I want to heal you again, it really got my attention and made me wonder. I also really like the sixth paragraph (or whatever they're called in poetry). Very well written.
Keep Writing
~~Meri~~ -
"The More You Try To Bleed,
The More I Try To Hold You,
[I Will Never Let You]
You Mean The World To Me,
And The Cuts I Hate To See,
[Let Me Fade Them All Away]"
OoOoOoH! i loved this part!
great job! -
OWw
forgot my applauds
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Nice
The layout and use of [] was great. i enjoyed reading it and hope to enjoy the rest of your stuff -
hey excelllent job here i t not like anything i readon this site before on cutting. I like the body of the poem very much keep writing
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i liked this one alot, not like alot of poems about cutting. theres nothing about the rush or thrill, to me it's more about trying to help or save the cutter...
Great Poem.
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This was a really great piece! i really liked how there were little segments put into this piece including the actual body. i like the whole idea of "holding on to you" and the whole idea of saving this person. there was a lot of great images and pictures that were created. i really like the ending line "let me fade them all away"
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thanks alot
~Ashley~
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this was very different than most cutting poems on this site...but it was good and powerful...this would make a really great song..you are talented keep up the good work..thank you for entering my contest and good luck
XTashaX
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