Longing, wanting, needing
I see you in my dreams
You are always
out of
reach....
I run, I jump
You are always
eluding
me....
I always seem
to fall behind
come up short
I want to be with you
your hand
out
of reach...
I want to touch the stars
And dream of catching you
You holding me
As we wrap our arms
Round
one another...
I would give you
All I have
To be held in your arms
But you are
always out of
reach....
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Written July 11th, 2003
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very beautiful,
we think along the same wavelength I think. -
excellent
heartwhenching yet beautifully written, indescibable in my opinon. i love the entire poem, but my fav, stanzas are:
I want to touch the stars
And dream of catching you
You holding me
As we wrap our arms
Round
one another...
I would give you
All I have
To be held in your arms
But you are
always out of
reach....
you write so beautifully and express your words are talently. amazing. beautifull picture for a beautiful poem. t/y for writing and posting this. ~Julzzz~ -
Don\"t Touch It!!!!!!!!
Susan, all I can say is WOW! When I read your words, it is if I can actually hear your voice speaking them. The pic is perfect! You ARE amazing. The only other person that can capture my attention where I can visualize and hear the words is Lurie, I just don't know how you guys do it????? Love it keep em coming. Skipper -
Man, that was really good, keep up the good work!
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awesome photo and background to frame your loving and yearning words...from all the above comments, it looks like you've read the hearts and minds of many with this piece..I think we've all gone thru the yearning over someone sometime in our lives...you've capture that feel perfectly in this piece...a magnificent write Susan!!!
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This one touches me, and makes me sad. I desire this so much about someone. It's as if you have looked into my soul. Beautiful writing. I love it. Really.
With Love,
Jey -
Beautifully done Susan. Your writing always touches me.
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Oh... Susan... if you only knew how close to home this hits for me these days... I love writes that make me feel less alone in my suffering... love you.
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Beautifully written......with such emotion.....Always out of reach..sometimes we need to stretch to obtain what we so desire..
Sometimes we reach it and sometimes it takes practice..wonderful write.......I really enjoyed this one.......lisa anne -
Second poem of you for me (I think!) and so far I have made only one conclusion...you write beautiful verses.
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The farthest star is the one nearby that you cannot reach. Cold heat. A fraction of an inch away feels the farthest from contact when subdued by will power. Ah, the mystery of desire.
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Another amazing piece for you hun. I can relate too well with this one (makes me weepy) The beauty of your words echo in my mind as I read this outloud. flowed like fine wine. loved it
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So close yet so far....I so know this feeling well.I'm glad I am not alone in this feeling.You expressed these feelings better thanI ever could. I appluad you greatly.
Such beauty in your words as always.
Great Write!
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Why can't love always be returned ??
Sometimes we dont know how lucky we have it
intil it's been taken away or not returned
this is a sad one hon*
What a beautiful pic! It goes so perfect with this sad poem
Susan your writing always touches the heart*
Wonderful job on this Hon* Such a sad pretty piece
Loves to Youuuuuuuu xOx ~Mina xOx
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My heartbeat definately went up 123048123409128120481204812084012804150912057893205735215-09327510934759
174567093465423748012394713294721094710945709321570239750923759023759023 75923750237509237590237509237523 beats per minute! SOMEONE PLEASE CALL ME A DOCTOR!! This was awesome. I know how it feels to be in that position. But then when I get out of it I get angry and if you want to read the angry side of all this read my poem "Hate is Wasted" You may or may not like it. Keep these writin skills up, dawg. Ok..yeah no...but really you write awesome...
-Spankie -
Incredibly Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Susan
This is perfectly written from your amazing heart
The images were sooooooooooo stunning
Love you,
Karen
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Good grief,woman!! You have done a masterful job with this one...everything is just right...the words, the mood, the sentiments...this is really excellent, Susan
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Very nice write Sis.. smooth as silken words left upon this page.. really nice
~GILL~xxx -
excellent
It's like you whent inside my head and picked a poem that says exactely how I feel.
I love this line
I would give you
All I have
To be held in your arms
I would also give all I had to be held in the arms of the man I like. But unfortunately he is out of reach. Sad yet amazing write.
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So many illusive treasures just out of our reach, sure makes them all the more tempting! When we do catch one, is it as good as it seemed? But then, those things out of reach that we truly want, we would give up much to have it. Well done.
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This definitely speaks of obssesion, well titled, and well written. I like that you added ...
I would give you
All I have
To be held in your arms
that is so often the case...
Well done..
~~whims -
Very very nice Miss Blush... I was thinking you might have called this "out of reach"... either way, it is certainly obsession too. Captured so nicely here- all of the emotions for when we strive so hard to be with someone, but always seem to fall short for one reason or another.
The structure works and word choice was solid- per usual.
Nicely done
Kindest regards,
Kimmie -
i enjoyed this very much. what did you do? kidnap these emotions and place them in jars to sprinkle over your poems? the picture goes very well with this write. wonderful word choice and lovely imagery.
-paige- -
I AM CRYING AS I WRITE THIS. I LOVE THIS PIECE. YOU REALLY CAPTURED THE EMOTIONS AND SEAL IT ON PAPER FOREVER. IT JUST HURTS ME ANd CAUSE PAIN TO READ THIS. THIS REALLY SOMETHING WRITTEN FROM THE HEART.
KEEP IT COMING MY FRIEND!!!!!!!!!!!
-QUEEN OF THE DAMNED
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Great
A beautiful piece. So heart felt. Beautiful!
~Somber -
This is such a good piece. 'sigh' i've had dreams like that before. Soo evill...yet i dont know how to explain the feeling really. great write, you got the feeling across really well. thanks for sharing it!
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ok susan, i need to ask you a question...
HOW THE HECK DID YOU KNOW EXACTLY WHAT I WAS THINKING!!!!!
lol, i bet you thought i was getting mad at my sister, but nope, i'm just curious how you knew exactly how i was feeling (i mean, what more proof do you need than the poem i just asked you to read of mine!!!??? Lol...)
I honestly had a dream a few days ago where he was waiting for me as i was getting ready after school, but once i was ready, he was gone :(...
It almost broke my heart...
and the poem kicked ass susan, how do you keep doing it, writing poems that i can not only relate to, but that i love to read??
lol, i love you too susan, and thanks for the happy birthday, means a lot
kayla* -
I know how you feel sweetie, everything that we either need or want always seems to be out of reach and i am so glad that you recognized this frustration. I loved it Susan, i loved it alot. Beautiful picture too, you always find the most amazing pictures to go along with your amazing poetry.. thanks hun.
Lynn -
AWE! It brings a tear to the eye! This is an excellent write! It's so soft and beautiful, with just the right ammount of saddness; one emotion doesn't overpower the other really. Very good. You have much talent!
~Epiphany
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What a great write..and yes the ones we want the most, Are always out of reach..very beautiful and delicate...
Well done, Kimberly -
This piece is amazingly beautiful and filled with emotions I know so well.You create such a wonderous picture in one's mind with your words.A true talent I cannot even begin to compare to.
BRAVO!
Great Write!
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Beautiful picture! and as usual, in combination with your write...WOW!
seems those things we want most are always out of reach..perhaps it's meant to be this way
another lovely write..much enjoyed
much love & peace to you & yours
~Pamela
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