Set me free
let me go
feeling that of a
captured rodent
begging to be loose
wanting to run
cannot move
cannot scream
pushed to the ground
unable to get up
voice not working
filled with fear
closing my eyes
never wanting to open.
Now I am free
letting go
the feeling now
is released
no more begging
no more running
I can move as fast as I want
I can scream as loud as I want
no longer on the ground
able to stand tall
my voice now works
the fear is gone
my eyes are open
and my tears are gone.
A contest entry
- There IS Life After The Abuse {Contest} by Viyanna Rosemarie.
800 points, ended May 1, 2007, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your pain by wolfcub.
600 points, ended June 1, 2007, 64 entries
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pushed to the ground
unable to get up
voice not working
filled with fear
closing my eyes
never wanting to open.
I have been there so I can relate to your poem. I am sorry for your hurt. It is express quite well. One can see healing in your words. Afer talking to many more women have had similar experinces and feelings. Shame they felt keep them from talking to anyone. I love your ending the fear now gone my voice came back.
This hope speaks hope to those who are hurting well done -
a very powerful poem , and your right we have to learn to forgive or we will never heal , i went in patient back in movember to deal with the anger that i had and this is when i started to write
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Thank you for reading & commenting on my poem. I wish you the best of luck in everything.
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thank you and that goes for you too
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Congratulation Hun.this is a really good poem.I wish you the best in contest
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Kaitlyn, congratulations on surviving and on writing one of the few writes i am not disqualifying. thank you for your entry and good luck in this contest. i know that the last six years have been tough. thank you for surviving. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you Viyanna Rosemarie,
thank you very much for commenting on my poem. I think this is an incredible thing you are doing with this contest. Best of luck in judging.
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I liked the way you showed the abuse in the beginning without going into gruesome detail, then showed your strength in the end. Very nicely done and good luck.
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Thank you very much Raker,
I did that because to me, unless I wrote about the pain I went through then felt like nobody would understand how I overcame the abuse.
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i can't beleive how you can let it go like that it's so powerful in setting yourself free i havn't let down this. I don't know how i could
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The first step for me, was I forgave him. It was honestly so extreamly hard but I cant live with that grude no matter what he did to me. I am sure that he has had bad things in his life that made him the way he is to have done that. I just couldnt handle all the hate I had for him, I had to let some of it go. I still think he's a bastard for taking his pain out on me...and probobly other innocent people, but I still forgive him.
~Kate~
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