Give me the power
Give me the bleach
Give me the rhythm
And here me screech
Give me the blue's
Give me the stones
Look at the ceiling
And here me groan
A contest entry
- Can you Rhyme (pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
334 points, ended April 3, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - To Live and Breathe and Never Die Again by pointlessdayz.
525 points, ended April 30, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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hmm, I liked this one, even though it was very simple... but is there any way you can incorporate the other two words that you left out? I would much appreciate that, and it would give you a better chance in the contest. Um, also, just thought you would like to know that the word "here" in this poem should be "hear" but you dont have to change it if you dont want to.
Thanks for entering!!!
-alex
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Good job, of a little yet thought provoking piece!
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This is good! The creativity used here is fascinating! Best wishes
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A very amazing piece definitely worth reading and so much worthy of a trophy. Great job here! Smiles, Terry
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Great
I really do love this piece of work. It is extremely unique. I do not quite get the message. I will read it again. Second reading, enjoyed reading, but still no message. Then I saw the poet's user name and everything was clear. Well done
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