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The Stalker

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The Stalker

I rose from my chair at the bar
I noticed his face had a scar
His leering gaze, gave me a scare
At the bar I rose from my chair

For the door I moved so coyly
His face was potted and oily
I hoped he would look for a whore
So coyly I moved for the door

Into the street I took my leave
Hoping my absence would deceive
A gentleman I’m afraid to meet
I took my leave into the street

I felt his breath behind my back
The night was cold as it was black
Shivering now as I knew death
Behind my back, I felt his breath

I quickened my pace, down the street
Terrified at the sound of his feet
I couldn’t stand to look at his face
Down the street, I quickened my pace

Pulled me near, his hand on my arm
I knew that this man would do me harm
This all confirmed my greatest fear
His hand on my arm pulled me near

Catching my eye, his shiny blade
I lost any hope that I had made
The last thing I see before I die
His shiny blade catching my eye

 

 

 

Author notes

Swap Quatrain:

Each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent stanzas.
Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.
The Swap Quatrain was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.

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  • breedluv gold member
    November 28, 2008
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    A very interesting form, and you have used it very well. Very good job!


  • Luckintheshadows
    September 9, 2008
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    Thank you for you AN. This is a superb poem, I enjoyed the imagery and the feelings of hopelessness/creepiness...I think you've perfectly titled this poem, and the whole was a pleasure to read! Thank you for sharing, and taking the time to enter my contest,

    Luck.

  • Luckintheshadows
    September 9, 2008

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    Thank you for you AN. This is a superb poem, I enjoyed the imagery and the feelings of hopelessness/creepiness...I think you've perfectly titled this poem, and the whole was a pleasure to read! Thank you for sharing, and taking the time to enter my contest,

    Luck.


  • skilter
    August 15, 2008

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    this kind of writing i have seen before, but not this well written and the flow is even better, very well write indeed!


  • second-born
    January 13, 2008

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    Thank you for sharing this fantastic piece...I enjoyed reading this one for it it is full of vivid images and has a good flow...


  • jcat gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    Thank you for recommending this piece to me... this is really good and I really enjoyed it.. good food for thought as well....


  • Jiyo
    July 23, 2007

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    oh man, that is an extremely trippy format you used, you did all that and it still has good rhythm and it all follows a story line, this is amazing, wow, thank you for this entry


  • WanderingCyclone
    June 11, 2007
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    I like it. Good luck.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Amazing! No, a recurring them for me. This is good!
    Check this one out...you may question my sanity...Mwahh ha ha!

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/1736355
    IM to follow!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 29, 2007

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    This was a really good write. It was frightful and gave you suspense. I loved that you were the character that was to be killed... That drew us in even further. I loved the whole rhyme scheme and I like the swap quatrain, though I struggle with the reversed lines.


  • Hated.
    April 27, 2007
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    this is really good i like the picture you used to and how its set up


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    April 18, 2007

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    as i read this i thought i was going to have a heart attack this was good, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Aeonna
    April 15, 2007

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    wow

    awesome, this poem reminded of jack the ripper.. the imagery was excellent, i wanted to know more before the end of your poem.. dark masterpiece, exactly what i'm looking for... great job poetess

    red roses


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    April 14, 2007

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    Excellently done hon.. the form is true and the story reminds me of Jack the Ripper. Is this what this work is based on? If so, I like it alot. Good luck in the contest

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 8, 2007
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    Beautiful imagery.


  • KissMeGoodnight
    April 6, 2007

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    oooo! chills! i like verrry much! you deserved more than the bronze! you had a pic and everything. and i love your background
    awesome job

  • hazydreams
    April 6, 2007
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    A Great poem. Love it. Like to read more of it. Great read. Nice job getting the bronze.


  • Dark Whispers
    April 5, 2007

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    the poem has capture my heart and has captivated my interest. great write. thanks for entering my contest and for that great poem. Your going to be a finalist. this is going to be a hard contest to judge.


  • sunny day
    April 3, 2007

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    Amera, I love it. I have not seen this form and this is very enticing. A dark and lurid tale you wove of Jack here. Profound imagery created from your elegant verbiage. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect and it flowed with ease. You are a very talented poet and I am happy to have found a new favorite in you, especially one who loves form poetry so much. Keep your golden in flowing and branch out as far as possible. There is not limit to which the imagination can take us. This was absolutely brilliant. Kudos my dear friend and thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest, it sounds golden. Love and God bless, Joyce

    • Amera gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      sunny day

      Your comments bring a smile to my face. You are such a great poetess yourself that I am honored when you read my work.

      Love,
      Amera


  • manoguru
    April 3, 2007

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    you have macabre imagination, that's beyond doubt, but more than the storyline of this particular poem, i was impressed by the new form of poetry as invented by m. kanter. i see that you are quickly maturing as a poetess... why not use the form to express some abstract emotion rather than convey a story?

    • Amera gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      manoguru

      Thanks so much! Your comments are always so helpful. When I see you commented on a poem, it’s like finding that small unwrapped present under the Christmas tree.

      Love,
      Amera


  • blueyez
    April 3, 2007
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    did I say this is awesome? It is awesome! like whoa I had to bookmark it and read it again!

  • blueyez
    April 3, 2007

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    I wanna try this formmmmmm! Wow you are so amazing! I so loved this write. It is like you are watching it unfold in a movie! So much description it is amazing!


  • Myth Of Twilight
    April 2, 2007
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    () great write i truly loved it great work ad good luck in my contest


  • PerVirtuous
    April 2, 2007

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    This was bone chilling! I want to follow you everywhere now to make sure this doesn't happen. the choice of words was very good. The flow was sinisterly beautiful. The ending was harrowing. Should doi exceptionally well in a dark contest! THree bunnies.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    April 2, 2007
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    Amera dear,

    this one is so good your Dad is bookmarking it.
    really nice dark, creepy write. Knives, you know I'd rather be shot than knifed, know why? cause a bullet usally, but not always, leaves a pretty clean wound and cauterizes somewhat as it goes through. A knife is a blood letting, bacterial filled, orgy of pain, especially in the hands of one who knows how to use it. We will not go there. easy enough to be defended against, usually, just gotta be willing to stay in close and inflict some damage of your own. Its those that weild a knife in their hand so you don't see it that are the most dangerous. The others are pikers, but still dangerous. Now, was that little tidbit of info creepy enough for you?

    Love ya,

    Dad PS next time call me on the cell...okay? we do not need harm coming to your lovely skin.


    • Amera gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      Dad

      I'm a wimp, I couldn't fight. I'd be dead. Ok, I'll call you.

      • JohnnyD gold member
        April 2, 2007

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        Well, I'm not near as fast as when I got out of the Marine Corps in 72 but..ya know, old age and treachery shall "always" overcome youth, quickness and skill???



        Dad

        • JohnnyD gold member
          April 2, 2007
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          LOL! well, you drive me nuts sometimes over this and that but I would not trade you for a second and love ya more than a banana split with a cute blonde on a Saturday night, and 'for me' thats saying a LOT!!! a whole lot! HEY, GOT A SPOON?



          Dad


  • Desire gold member
    April 2, 2007
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    Powerful-

    Powerful piece You have penned my Friend
    Love the form You used and the rhyme
    What images You share and kept me on the edge of my seat~
    Loved this one!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

    • Amera gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      Disire

      Thanks Desire, I thought it would be fun to die in the end. How many poems do that? I’m a spooky girl.



      • Desire gold member
        April 2, 2007

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        Not many that's for sure...
        Usually the person wakes up from a Dream

        Magnificent


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 2, 2007

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    as i know nothing about this form i will trust that you have done it correctly. i do know plenty about the topic though. a reality i have lived for several years only i know not whom it is. only that things have settled a bit...thank God!!! good luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie

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