With you.
A brush, wind warm, softly perfumed,
your scent, sweeps - in a whisper,
across my cheek. Familiar, so
steadily remembered, your hand
finds home,
just - under - my arm.
And music fades, distantly,
as echo-sounds, cricket songs
halt, momentarily;
and your whispered, “hello”
transcends Any peace-filled
summer’s eve.
Being with you,
walking beside you,
Becomes
a rain drop experience,
wet, within and without,
where our dancing
fingers erase all God’s tears
In the cool breath of night.
Life opens itself, again, again.
Rose petals, pressed gently - become
succulent prayers, placed perfectly,
elegantly, upon my lips. My tongue,
lost, searching for your words,
sighed, aloud, - ahhhh -
as we , as one, walk on.
~r.
All rights reserved,© April 2007 R. Braley
(astralshepherd)
(http://www.myspace.com/astralshepherdpoetry)
Author notes
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(http://www.myspace.com/astralshepherdpoetry)
or here -
Click here to listen "Poem-with-you"
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Now that is one beautiful poem. Simply breathtakingly moving and so elegantly written.
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A brush, wind warm, softly perfumed,
your scent, sweeps - in a whisper,
across my cheek. Familiar, so
steadily remembered, your hand
finds home,
just - under - my arm.
And music fades, distantly,
as echo-sounds, cricket songs
halt, momentarily;
and your whispered, “hello”
transcends Any peace-filled
summer’s eve.
good poem -
wow
that was beautiful -
wow..
I love this poem... Its amazing!
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Very Good
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That is extremely beautiful... i have no idea, the words are like frosting or icing, they totally cover something great in wonderfulness and make it perfect. It is like a bunch of pictures and beautiful words all together making so much greatness.
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woww. this is amazing
i usually read poems that rhyme,
but the fact this one doesnt makes me
love it even more :]
keep writing.
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Well done!
A gentle and loving read, this oozes the authentic sweet scent of love in bloom. Beautifuly written.
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Wow i really enjoyed that! Good Job! Makes me feel if i am there! Keep up the great work!
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Ah, how beautiful. Love making so subtly ambient by all Gods treasures. Such a beautiful write. Awesome..
Kelli
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What a beautiful poem! I really couldn't find anything really wrong with the thing, and for me that is something. It really does touch the heart, and does and wonderfully job of displaying emotions, so that others can enjoy it even more. (I am a big softie for good poems.)
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You are very intuitive, and have such a beautiful talent. This poem of love is so simple, but beautifuly complicated to many measures. As a british rock group "The Beatles" wrote: Love is much more than just holding hands...but it is in fact these such fundamental and simplistic gestures of true love that make love what it evolves to be in the end!
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I am spellbound by the degree of talent I see and hear here. I simply do not want to leave your page, in hope that some of it might rub off on me as well. Don't ever lose your edge. Keep that pen handy dear poet!
midnight lace -
Wow - the imagery here is spectacularly delivered by a very talented writer! Loved the emotion laced within this work. Excellent write here!
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Yours is the first audio of any poem I've come to hear at AP, and though my old 'puter took a while to load the file to play, it really does add an extra texture to hear the poem read in the writer's own voice.
Atlantic Monthly used to feature audio-readings of famous poets reading their works at their site--(Billy Collins, some old Ginsberg files, etc.), and I really enjoy the audio-enhancement.
Lovely poem, both to hear and to read and glad I came to this poem-post!
Jo -
Wonderful!!!
Richard this is great! I think you should publish your works. Then maybe do a book reading tour like at Borders. Which may be what your already doing. Anyhow if you make it to Texas let me know where you'll be performing. I like the way your poems make me feel. This one is wonderful and romantic.
Thanks,
RedSnow
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this is like
breathing fresh air after a summer rain. Smile.
Judy
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Very beautiful!!!
So serene, especially when I listened to you read it in your own words. This dual medium gives the piece an ethereal quality to it that I enjoyed. The rythym flowed with grace and ease and I found it a thoroughly effective read from start to finish.
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My gentle shepherd, what better place than to be with someone enveloped, draped, wrapped in oneness! I simply cannot add anything to this poem or I would be taking away from it. I leave, smitten like a rose, murmuring her succulent prayers.
Belle
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Home...
I read this three times trying to understand why I felt as though I was being led...then I read the contest...WOW, that ability to evoke all of the senses...I've been away from your writes for too long, my friend...gentle, loving and the two lines, "Familiar, so steadily remembered, your hand finds home..." and "where our dancing fingers erase all God's tears"...breathtaking imagery...so real I can feel it...Bless you, poet...Peace, Rhonda
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This is very beautiful: it took me to a place I'd like to get to again. Lovely use of words to invoke sensation. Much appreciated.
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*smiles* i walked your journey with you dreaming of the one I love all the while. The thoughts and ideas captured here were as i would love them to be. thank you so much for sharing this with us.
~ A heart's hope lies with Belladonna ~
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Very soft and tender, reminding me of the poem Footprints. The font is perfect for this wonderful piece. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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Very nice. I like the third stanza of the poem very much.
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Just lovely my dear as always you warmed my heart. I thank you for your kind words on my bronze win, I appreciate your friendship.
Vsutton keep penning you have amazing talent -
This write,especially the 2nd last line,show such a strong view of a gentle emotion.i love every bit of it.this is a great write.keep up the great writing and good luck in the contest
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amazing
this would make a great song
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