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Release

Deep in your dreams
the siren screams,
exhale a heavy groan.
Slow to awake,
tension headache
your constant metronome.

You cannot face your life today.
You plead to make it go away.
You crawl back into bed to stay.
sleep... sleep... sleep...
Your only release.

Acquire a shrink,
don't even blink,
pick up that phone and call.
Breathe deep then dial,
Your life's worthwhile,
don't be ashamed at all.

Before you run you first must walk,
with help of medicine and talk.
follow your program, do not balk,
seek... speak... treat...
soon you'll find release.





 

Author notes

If you are depressed and/or suicidal, please get help. Here are a few resources:

metanoia ~ http://www.metanoia.org ~ http://www.metanoia.org/suicide/

AFSP Association for Suicide Prevention ~ http://www.afsp.org/

NAMI National Association of Mental Illness ~ http://www.nami.org/

Parents, there's help for you, too!

Parental Stress Line ~ 1-800-632-8188 ~ www.parentshelpingparents.org

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  • Vera Rich gold member
    April 15
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    Thank you for entering the Health Care poems competition.

    And I see that in the past you have received some enthusiastic comments about it.

    However, I have to say that - to my ear - the last stanza is rather a let-down.

    I am putting on the short-list, however; so please do not despair.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    April 8
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    Good.


  • Nellas
    July 9, 2008

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    even though you have won on this I am going to let this stand here. because you thought of this with myself in mind. I thank you very much.


  • debilynn gold member
    February 5, 2008

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    this has great meaning for me...it almost suits me...if i let that monster depression take over. i like how you expressed this very well. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
    P.S. love this background also!


  • Prison of Lyme
    November 5, 2007

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    Nice Job!

    Been there before. It is definitely a sad time, but there is always a light at the end of the tunnel. Just when we think mental illness has killed our souls. We can bounce back and it seems like a bad dream.

    Ms.Melanie


  • Desired-Lucidity
    November 4, 2007
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    WOW....what a great poem. it really is how people deal with these illnesses and how they should


  • earthstar
    July 27, 2007

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    I wish they could find a program that works. It goes so slow at a time.I hope you are feeling better.Right now crawling is my stage.Take it easy maybe some day I can get to this point. This gives us hope. I am still struggling with the issues take care


  • kooleyes
    July 14, 2007
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    wow this is so true. I can relate to this feeling. Thanks for the read and keep on writing


  • aslanlight
    April 16, 2007

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    Yeah you're absolutely right, we have to make the effort to overcome things like depression. It's not always easy but is worth it. Thanks for your encouragement.

    Love, light & peace

    Georgia


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 3, 2007

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    Wonderful words of advice here. I totally agree, as one who suffers exactly as you have described. Sleep if often my saviour, albeit briefly! Every word you have said is so true and you have written it clearly and succintly.
    All the best with this.
    Gaylene


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    April 2, 2007

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    this was a great write..i really enjoyed reading this..your words were strong, powerful and emotional..you are a very talented author and good luck in the contest

    ~Chrissy~


  • Frogzter gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    WOnderful words... great rhymes and message! Thanks so much for entering this has quite a profound message! Blessings and best wishes,
    Frogz~


  • Twins 4 me
    April 2, 2007
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    Very good! I liked the flow and the rhyme!

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