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- Balconies of Heaven -

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~ * ~

Morning Dad,

I thought you might need a

wake-up call on this beautiful day.

The Angels and I've already had communion

and in my prayers, I did ask God to

make sure he keeps an eye

out for you.

~ * ~

I need you

to know that the Lord has

been taking great care of me while up

here in the heavens above, and he allows me

to watch over the balconies, where

I have seen your tears, but

Dad, don't cry.

~ * ~

Gods' love is

designed to be perfect,

and there is no flaw in his plans for

those who have Faith, believing upon his Holy

word, and sharing your courage as you

have done since we parted.

I'm still here.

~ * ~

Yes, it may

be lonely for you, and

you might not understand why it was

my turn to leave you, but know in your heart I am

with you always, until the day comes

when God sends for you too.

Love you, Dad.

~ * ~

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Author notes:

 

Option # 1

 

To my wonderful Brother, Gary ~

 

A Triquain String

 

A Triquain is a seven line poem with syllables in multiples of 3 as follows:
3, 6, 9, 12, 9, 6, 3 This form is always centered.

~ Triquain...created by Shelley Cephas,

aka...ShelleyA ~

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  • badnovocaine
    December 11, 2008

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    Powerful!!!!

    This really hit me hard, I think because my mom passed away when I was younger and I am always wondering how she is doing, it is just one of those things where I wish, maybe for one moment I could send a letter to her, to let her know I still love her.

    This poem is really good, and it left an imprint in me, like quite footsteps of words echoing through my mind.
    I can honestly say you have my respects
    ------
    Yes, it may
    be lonely for you, and
    you might not understand why it was
    my turn to leave you, but know in your heart I am
    with you always
    -------
    Such words
    Congrats on the silver


    • Arkbear gold member
      December 11, 2008
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      You're very kind.....and yes, your Mother is also looking down at you over the balconies of heaven.....and yes, she knows you still love her and thnk about her all the time ~

      She will be there when you walk through those Pearly Gates....God bless you,

      Bear ~


  • Robin Candor
    May 9, 2007

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    Nothing left to chance

    I was going to give you a ten for the son conversing with the Father and then read the rules where this was one of the options. That is ok as you did a fabulous job of making that happen. Secondly, as a rogue poet who writes whatever I please, you did all that was possible in maintaining the form you chose and having the conversation. Third, you maintained througout the piece the son's ability to see through the pale knowing the Father cannot. The expression of feelings from the otherside for the one now trapped in space and time is priceless. Also the presentation of ultimate destiny without any trappings is well performed. Finally, I believe it was a supreme touch to mention that we are all mortal and the Dad will soon, in his time, face the crossing over himself. I did not read what took gold, and it does not matter. You got it from beginning to end and faced the confinement of the form you chose as well. Bravo!


  • getsbetter
    April 9, 2007

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    What do I say to such woderful friends I have here at AP. I will keep these poems and read each one to him at his site on his memorial date, also I will be adding them to his page here. These precious words you all have written here have touched me more than you will ever know and the tears the words have brought. But tears I wouldnt trade for the world to and from you beautiful people here. I thank you from the very bottom of my heart for taking this time from your valueable days and family. God bless...Love GETS


  • Lionsloves Lair
    April 8, 2007
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    3 claps...9pts

    Reward from the Lionsloves Lair reading list

    ~Lilac


  • Celticmoon
    April 5, 2007

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    Please forgive my standarized comment here, but I am too emotional to see or think straight to leave a proper comment but felt a comment was certainly called for. I want to thank you for taking the time to honor Gary and his son Adam. Your words and sentiment are truly felt, trust me. My tears don't lie.


    PS

    You owe me one dollar for a box of tissues I used reading this.


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 5, 2007
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      Bel ~

      Your review is most kind ~

      I love my Brother Gary and I just hope this helps, rather than saddens him ~

      This was not an easy write to pen, but I think the good Lord helped quite a bit for me to finish it ~

      Sorry about the tissues

      Bear ~


  • Whoochi gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    OH....this was sent from the angels above and flew right into your words....heaven-sent. am so glad when I see that God is using those he loves as a vessel to express himself..and thats exactly what you did here...a wonderful tribute to your brother...gave me chills, good goosebumps, tears in my eyes, and a warmth in my heart....Good luck...Form is outstanding...you surely have an awesome gift in your wondrous writes....


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 4, 2007
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      Hey there Whoochi ~

      Such a lovely review on this piece ~

      I wrote it...but you're making ME cry just by your sensitivity and Faith ~

      I am so happy to know that there are many people turning from their old ways and accepting the FACT, that we are not just humans on a floating planet that just happens to sustain Life ~

      The miracle of the human bodys make-up, should be a wake-up call all by itself ~

      Thank you so much for your courageous comments and sharing your thoughts of Faith Hope & Love ~

      Have a beautiful day my Friend,
      ...always..
      Bear ~


  • FisherCat
    April 3, 2007

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    Very Touching!

    Damn, What a write!! What a read!! Absolutely a tear jerker. This is just sooo sad, but yet sooo beautiful!! Yes there will be a time, when we will all be in God's Kingdom. My heart goes out to your brother, I kinda know how he feels. Once again this was just absolutely beautiful! Thanks for sharing this most wonderful write. Keep that pen flowing. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Anjole-Of-The-Artz
    April 3, 2007

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    Aw

    This is touching & beautiful. It's always hard to lose the ones we love, and having faith in what will be is all that keeps us going sometimes. <3 Gorgeous.


  • lilrochick silver member
    April 3, 2007

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    This was a very touching poem. Its a conversation that to anyone who has ever lost someone wishes they could have. To talk with that person one last time to know that they are all right and that they are watching over us. Beautiful write. Thanks for sharing.

    Ro


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      Ro ~

      Thank you my fellow Poet for your most kind review ~

      This poem meant a lot to me, as I hope it touches Garys heart as well ~

      He's my Bubba and he has a heart of Gold that shines sooo bright ~

      Have a wonderful day ~



      Bear ~


  • ShelleyA gold member
    April 3, 2007

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    Outstanding

    A beautiful write and message to Gary from the perspective of his son. Heartfelt. A wonderful letter of love from a son to his father. Very good flow and tone. Touching and poignant. Perfect form. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read. I think Gary will be delighted with this poem. Love shines so brightly in this piece.


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 3, 2007

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      My Dear Friend, Shelley ~

      Not only do I want to thank you for your review, but I would also like to thank you for allowing me to use your own personal created form... The *Triquain*, to pen something special for my brother, Gary ~

      He deserves the best right now, and I feel the Triquain is one of the most beautiful Forms of Poetry which can be utilized to present our message ~

      Thank you my Friend for your guidance during this process ~

      ...always,
      Bear ~


      • ShelleyA gold member
        April 3, 2007
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        Bear, you're very welcome. It's a pleasure to read your poetry. I'm honored that you chose to write this poem in my form. Thank you.


  • Frozentearz
    April 3, 2007

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    awwwwwwww gesssssssh dabs tearz,
    so emotional and beautiful I am sure you will touch his heart,
    Simply beautiful in thought.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      My Dear Tearz ~

      Thank you my Dear Friend for your words ~
      I know you will keep him in your prayers as we are all doing right now ~

      My Johnny leaves for bootcamp in July, and I am going to have a HARD time with his departure...so I can only hope this poem eases some of Garys loss at this time ~

      Have a great day my Dear ~

      Bear ~


  • Star Shine
    April 3, 2007

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    Well, you have tugged at my heartstrings this morning, this is quite a tearjerker, it gives such a sense of comfort and peace, I think all who have had someone pass on can identify with it from the part of the message's recipient. Thank you for sharing this, it is awesome. God Bless.


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      Star Shine ~

      What a lovely name

      Thank you for taking the time to stop by and read this write ~

      Your words are very encouraging as I know they will make my brother smile as well ~



      Have a terrific day!

      Bear ~


  • trista gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    This is beautiful...both in form and thought, and Gary will undoubtedly love every word. You write with such heart and serenity, quiet assurance and 100% certainty that Adam is with God in heaven. I could not help but think of my own son in heaven as I read, believing that he too looks down from heaven's balconies. Thank you for sharing this most touching write.

    Much love,
    ~J.


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      Trista ~

      I am so glad you could relate to this poem my Friend ~
      ...and yes....your son is definately overlooking the balconies of heaven which only God has prepared ~

      Thank you for your heartfelt review and I hope you have found comfort within this write ~

      I pray that my brother Gary finds Peace in it as well ~

      God bless,
      always,

      Bear ~


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    Hi uncle - yes this is so heartfelt and is such a wonderful form you have used. This always looks so neat and tidy, and you always do such a great job using the form too. How can this not help Gary get over this day, and the memories that it holds. I am sure this will be one of his favorites in the contest. Awesome!


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      Erika, my sweet Niece ~

      I am pleased that you enjoyed this write, as it meant a lot to me to be able to pen something special for my brother that would lift his spirits at this time ~

      Thank you soooo much for your lovely words ~

      Uncle Bear ~


  • StarEyes
    April 2, 2007

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    My Dearest Uncle,

    This is sooooooo touching!! It brought tears to my eyes. I know the feelings that you speak of in this piece, and hit real close to home! You did a great job on this one! Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece with us!

    That pain, is sooo real and sooo deep, and will remain that way for a very long time.  The day you will come when we will join those that we love in the heavens above!  We will feel their hugs as they hold us close.

    Keep that pen flowing. Best of luck in the contest.

    Love ya

    Nyetta


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      My Dear Niece, Nyetta ~

      You are right.....the day will come when we will join those who have gone home before us, and feel the hugs which are going to be 10000000 X's better than the ones we shared here on earth ~

      I hope this will ease the pain which Gary has endured, and I hope he can find peace in knowing that Adam is in the best of hands right now ~

      Thank you my sweet Niece for your kind review ~

      Uncle Bear ~


  • Desire gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    Precious-

    Oh My Brother Bear
    This is one Precious piece You have penned and from the Heart of one who gives to others
    Beautiful words to Touch and tug the Heartstrings~
    Gorgeous Triquain~
    Love the entire piece ~ to difficult to pick just one part~ All of it Touches!!
    I imagine smiles and tears shed...
    How can one not~


    This Precious Gift is Magnificent my Brother~
    Thank You for bringing this forth
    You are also a Gem that sparkles and helps
    make the World a better place to live in~
    Truly a Blessing~

    Best wishes to You in the contest!!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      My Dear Sis, Desire ~

      As always, you have touched my heart with your review ~

      Gary is my Bubba, and I shall always feel a connection with him as Timmy and I have shared ~

      I wonder if Timmy and Adam are up there Judging this contest as well??!!






      They are both sooo lucky, because I believe.....

      ~ To be absent from the body,
      is to be present with the Lord in Spirit ~

      I hope Gary is encouraged from all of our writes, and I pray that he finds serenity, knowing, that his boy is in Gods' hands now and strapping on his wings to flutter down and be by his Dad when Gary needs comfort, peace and understanding ~

      Luv you Sis,

      ...always,



      Brother Bear ~


  • Stickboy
    April 2, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww This is souch a touching heartfelt write you have written for Gary....Adam must have been a beautiful soul... I know Gary is just from his writtings and what others say about him! Good luck in this contest


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      My brother Sean ~

      Thank you Bro for your time and special words..as well as for the applauses ~
      You are most kind...and I hope you are doing MUCH better today after surgery ~

      My prayers are still going out to you as we speak ~

      Thank you for the best wishes in this contest....but I would do it for free, just because I love him so ~

      Brother Bear ~


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    Oh, Bear....this is so very beautiful...
    I was just working on mine for Gets....
    He will be so touched by this breathtaking, sensitive write....
    I am in tears...
    This is so wonderful, my friend....


    Lynda


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      Lynda ~

      I hope Gary feels exactly as I do after reading your review ~

      You have made me feel comforted to know that this piece will touch Gary, as it touched me when I penned it ~

      Gary is the most Loving guy I know, and I pray that he finds strength through this poem ~

      Much love,

      Bear ~


  • smiley
    April 2, 2007

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    Bravo, Bravo

    I really felt the emotions in this piece. Well written and I do like the form... Good luck in the contest.

    Yvonne


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 2, 2007
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      Yvonne ~

      Thank you so much for your review and the applauses...I wanted to say so much more, but I think Gary and his son have a bond beyond our understanding ~

      I hope my brother will find peace in this write ~

      God bless,
      Bear ~

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