Go ahead and break my heart
Grab it at the seams and rip it apart
Yell it, scream it, tell me you don’t care
Make me cover my ears and rip out my hair
Lie to me, trick me, sneak around
Keep your secrets never found
Hit me, beat me, call me names
Let our relationship go up in flames
Go through life pretending you never met me
Forget the sleepless nights filled with ecstasy
Don’t speak my name don’t even whisper it
Maybe that will make me easier to forget
Forget your promises, the ones you always planned to break
My heart is my wound and loving you was my mistake
Now do me a favor, it might be smart
Get out of my life, and break my heart
In a list
A contest entry
- For those with four or less by Lactar Wolfgang.
375 points, ended April 9, 2007, 27 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Very Best #2 (pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
415 points, ended April 18, 2007, 38 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - hate, anger, breakups by Beautyfull-x-Angel.
600 points, ended June 8, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Letting Go by lizwicker.
1050 points, ended September 9, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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That's Right
I agre with you here...I mean just do it already! I mean he finally did, but sometimes we hold on just a tad too long, great write!
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wow... now that is what i call a heartfelt poem. i love this one... partly cuz i know what you are feeling - well not exactly but i know what heartbreak feels like. good job!
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PoisonDaggers Excellent write Dear Congrats on all the trophies I wish you the best of luck in my contest Thank you for entering
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Congrats on the trophies.
"Now do me a favor, it might be smart
Get out of my life, and break my heart"
awesomely written here, love that rhyme there. love the message of this one. greatly written. -
the rhyme is fine, but it's the flow I have problems with. It's very choppy and hard to follow sometimes. I like the poem and it's message though!
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wow such a short poem filled with suck emotion, pain, heartache and yet a sence of self worth thanx and good luck
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Gut wrenching emotion.... you've done an amazing job with the imagery in this piece, kudos to a job well done. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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Well. I've gotta disagree with Pariah. I realllllly don't dig the rhyme. That, and the topic was so...eh...cliche. I hate cliche. Alot. But Pariah liked it, and she's definatly a better judge of poetry than me. I'm too particular. Back to this, yeah, put some more vivid language in it as well. If you use more unique words, your piece will take on a more personal and unique feel.
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Being a judge myself, I don't really like when people enter several contests on top of mine; Especially if they've ended months from today. So, I would suggest maybe removing your poem from a couple of the contests that were already judged. But anyway, sorry for that. Moving onto the poem:
The rhyme didn't seem forced, not to me anyway. It aided in the flow of the piece.
The emotion was present; I think it's a topic that most can relate to, even in the littlest bit.
I'm not so sure how Liberation of Sense will like it, but overall, for me; this is a good poem.
I would suggest adding a little more variation of wording, but I mean the structure and basic elements of the piece was wonderful.
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awwwwww! this was soooooooooooooooooooooooooo sad!
but beautifully written I really enjoyed reading this piece!!! this poem has amazing imagery and an amazing flow!!! thanks for entering!! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Great job on this! The flow is impecable and the images it creates are wonderful. Good job. Write on, poet. congrats on the win.
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Awww so sad but such a great poem I can feel a lot of anger in this..you are such a great writer and this poem was very interesting good luck in this contest and take care
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this was a great poem, and I really enjoyed, the flow of it really ties it together, thanks for entering .
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I can't really say anything no one else has already said, but so far this is my favorite one I've read in the "Titles for Everyone" contest. It's a great write. Thanks for sharing and good luck. Take care.
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"Lie to me, trick me, sneak around
Keep your secrets never found"
this is really good! i loved how you expressed yourself so eliquently!
great write!
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THank you so much for entering my contest.
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wow amazing poem just wut i was lookin for
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wow this poem is so full of emotion that my eyes started to tear. It flowed well i really enjoyed reading it. good luck.
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WOW, THAT WAS VERY INTENSE. YOU NAIL THAT EMOTION OF ANGER. I HAVE FELT THIS EMOTION ONLY ONCE. THANK THE GOOD LORD. THIS EXPRESSED PAIN AND ANGER AND A SORT OF GIVING UP BECAUSE YOU HAVE HAD ENOUGH AND CAN'T TAKE IT ANY MORE. VERY GOOD WRITING , IT FLOWED WELL. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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Wow I angry emotional peice. I think this is well written and full of emotion. I love that in poems. Poems written from the heart or that have that feel to them are just super in my mind.... I like this alot
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This was quite an emotional write, very well written. Slight error in the line " Let out relationship" should read "Let our". I enjoyed the venting as it was well composed...and they say that keeping these things bottled up inside us, do us no good...so you have come a good way into dealing with a sour relationship. Bravo
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Wow! This is good. It's filled with such anger and pain. I like it. I love your rhyming as well. Nicely done. Good job. Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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