Screaming & Bleeding,
You Failed Miserably This Time,
[A Million Miles From Size Zero]
Starving & Purging
[Have The Lies Gone Away Yet]
I See You Crying On The Floor,
Trying To Pick Up The Pieces,
[They Won't Fit Together]
Then You Reach For The Blade,
[I Won't Let You Do It]
Black Eyeliner Runs Down Your Face,
As You Stare In Disblief
[I Always Loved You]
You Stare Into The Shattered Mirror
But Your View Is Distorted,
As The Managled Reflection You See Looks Back,
[Let Me Hold You]
The Grey Chains Of Ana Hold You Down,
As I Watch You Struggling To Break Free,
Burning Away Your Last Calories,
[Look At What You've Become]
Theres No More Sparkel In Your Eyes
[And Baby You're My Beautiful Disaster]
I Hate The Fake Smiles
[When Can I Hear Your Laughter Again]
When I Tried To Stop You I Saw Scarlet Gashes
[Baby Why Have You Fallen Again]
I Saw Your Painful Eyes When You Pushed Us All Away,
I Watched You Fall Right Into A Relaspe
[Let Me Pick You Out Again]
Counting Calories & Telling Lies
[I Can See It In Your Eyes]
A Sleepness Night & A Trembling Body
[You're Dying Inside, Does It Hurt]
I Will Never Let You Push Me Away,
I Know You Better,
[I Love You Even More]
I Watched You Fall Apart,
And Now I'm Here To Pick Up The Pieces,
And Sew Together Your Broken Heart,
Killing To See Your Eyes Glitter Again,
[Let My Love Put It Back Sweet Angel]
Author notes
♥ Broken Hearts ♥ (A Contest For My Birthday)
Option 4 Eating Disorders, Option 1 Words : laughter, painful,disbelief,chains,blade,scarlet,mangled,reflection,distorted,pieces,fallen,black,eyeliner,glitter,sparkel,grey,disaster,lies, fake, smile changed to smiles, and shatter changed to shattered
Metaphorical beauty 5 options
Option 5 {Fallenangel671}
A contest entry
- ♥ Broken Hearts ♥ (A Contest For My Birthday) by Bruised.Roses.
450 points, ended April 16, 2007, 21 entries
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I really loved this. I had to read it over and over, I couldn't help it. It's amazing, and it was very powerful. You have alot of talent.
xx Julie.
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I suggested the name beautiful disaster to someone before and they didn't like it but you have taken it and done it amazingly I am glad there is someone who can appreciate oxymorons as I do!!! -
Awww just so sweet, very beautiful and loving at the same time, giving them hope and light again, healing their broken wings, making them smile and happy.....
I love this so much
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RAw emotional writes of yours I am seeing, but would like to see some variety in them. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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I Saw Your Painful Eyes When You Pushed Us All Away,
I Watched You Fall Right Into A Relaspe
[Let Me Pick You Out Again]
Counting Calories & Telling Lies
[I Can See It In Your Eyes]
A Sleepness Night & A Trembling Body
[You're Dying Inside, Does It Hurt]
this part is my favorite, even tho the whle poem rocked!!!!
great write!
BR
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a lot of passion goes in to each one of ur writes and it shows.
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This is really, really good. I have been through this with my best friend, and it is just such an accurate portrayal of how you feel when you see someone you love going through all that. I hope for your sake that this poem is hypothetical and fictional, that you don't have anyone going through this.
I See You Crying On The Floor,
Trying To Pick Up The Pieces,
[They Won't Fit Together]
That's such an amazing description of how it feels when you have an eating disorder.
I only have one little comment: "Sparkel" should be spelt "sparkle." But seriously, this is fantastic. -
Beautiful
Wow, just wow! This is stunning, and so sad to read, I love the point of view you've taken it from, makes the poem really touching. Fits the contest really well too, and I'm so pleased to get such a great entry from you, so thankyou =]
Is about an issue that means a lot to me as well, so this really hit on a personal level. Just such a great write, bravo!
Good luck =]
Frankie xXx
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this was a good entry. I really enjoyed reading this..i can relate to this poem and it touched me. you are very talented and your writting is very different and unique. this would make a good song. keep writting, thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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This was a great write..your words were very strong, powerful and emotional as well..i can really relate to what you are saying and feeling in this poem..you did a great job at using the wordbank as well and created a great poem..keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest
~Chrissy~
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