Whisper that hushed and silent sound
sing me the song you know tears me down.
Wish away the shivers on the spine,
your wasting your time.
Wasting time.
Pick away the bitterness,
watch as you begin to miss, me.
Blow away the kisses left painted on your lips,
smell the flower sent left in your bedroom in bliss,
and I hope you think of me
(think of me.)
All this time has me filling spaces,
wishing you'd begin to see me.
Taking memories and swallowing them like the pills inside my hand.
Watch as my soul screams wishing you'd just think of me.
(think of me.)
Wipe away the tears as you down another beer,
does that really make you feel,
or are you just filled with an overbearing fear?
Wish you weren't there.
The chorus to this song would be just another note,
on a pointless piece of paper spit out from deep inside my soul.
It wouldn't make me whole.
You wouldn't make me whole.
(make me whole.)
Author notes
I dont know.
Neriness wanted to know why I hadn't wrote nothing in a while. But this is why, cause it sucks big time =/ I don't know writers block.
lol
Please tell me what you think
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Line 4: the first your should be "you're"
Lines 8 & 9: beautiful!
Lines 23, 24, & 25: Very nice ending!
The poem (or letter, rather,) is raw and emotional and similar to something I might write. The internal conflict and the contradiction at the end bring the poem together nicely
Love ya babe.
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When ever you have a negative, you can always find a positive, and you can always find a negative when you have a positive, situations can be used as a curse or a blessing depending on how you use them. You did an awesome job on writing this, deep, heartfelt, leaving that empty longing that stays in the back of your throat. You seriously have a gift of pinning your emotions.
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i love you, hun
Just remember that life has ups and downs... and we must go through both.
You truly are a good writer. I really like this one.
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it does suck to have itbut when you write it is the greatest release, you did a great job on this, keep it flowing
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You did a great job on this. If it was writers block, wish i had it. X's Duckie
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Well, this is definately NOT writers block.
Some really great lines in here. Great job sweetie.
Love
xChaosx
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