I look in the mirror and what do I see?
Someone I don’t know but that person is me,
I see a person, whose heart has been broken too many times,
Whose anger makes her have more pride,
Who will do anything to hide her pain,
A person who sits and cries in the rain,
A person who lets anger control her mind,
Someone who seeks compromise that she cannot find,
A life that has been messed up from the start,
Whose family is ruined and has fallen apart,
A person who tosses and turns at night,
Preferring to be in the dark instead of the light,
With dreams so big she wished she could achieve,
A person who just wants to run away, get out, leave,
A person who funs from nightmare to nightmare,
A person who nobody loves, whose heart is black and doesn’t care,
A girl whose soul is lost and can’t be found,
Whose future is blurry and wants to turn around,
Someone who loves a boy more then anyone knows,
Who doesn’t care what people think this is the path she chose,
A person who wishes she could just die,
Whose heart is torn apart from all the lies,
Now I see all this, hidden behind my own eyes.
A contest entry
- Book Of Identity by Hebz.
300 points, ended April 14, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Identity by koppaspider.
750 points, ended May 9, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS OPTIONS OPTIONS! (and some that you don't see everyday!) by sharkofdhoom.
500 points, ended May 13, 2007, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - First contest,Four options, i'll love you forever if you enter? by Jaffa-.
560 points, ended November 11, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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That was absolutly beautiful and now i'm blubbering like a baby. That was an amazing peice and you should be very proud of yourself. Such great emotion and amazing description. But no matter how good it is you will not win a trophy without your username and **HeartbrokenHeadcase** in your author notes. I took the time to read the poem so the least you could do is follow my rules. xoo
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sorry. i was in a hurry. but they are in there now.
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this was very intersting
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The call of desperation!
We all go through the teenage crises & hopefully learn from all those explosive feelings using them to guide us through the rest of our lives.
Know that you're not alone in your troubles - these are hard for one so young.
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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Very nice. The title is awesome "Behind My eyes" ...very original, and it fits the poem nicely. Good job with the rhythm/flow and rhyme, too!
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This is very raw, very honest and filled with deep emotion. You've done a great job with it. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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this sounds exactly how i feel. very well written and good job and good luck in the contest.
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Wow I really like this one, you followed the theme of idenity very well. Good job!
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Droning...
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That's very nice, but did u add the other 2 entries?
If yes, plz send me a message with the titles...thnx & very good luck in the contest...
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some lines are a little off but i love the content, so good poem
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