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Schizophrenia

I am split-
There is no defining line
To seperate the halves.
Necessity has molded
Them together, though
They sometimes form a sort of
Cleavage if you will.

I am split-
Helplessly torn apart
By elements hitherto
Unknown and unexperienced-

I will unleash
My fury like a tempest,
Fists beating on
The Great Walls of China,
A starved beggar entreating
Entrace to a feast.

A delicacy! A fish-head,
Served up with the eyes-
I will watch you,
And I will calculate you
And all the while
You will think
'tis an honor!

Oh love, I am split!
I am split-
See the cleave, love?
See the gaping hole in me?
Will you love me all the same?

There is more of me
To love now.

Author notes

I'm only 13, so please comment nicely lol. And anyways, I do believe my muse is coming back...she better be, at least...I do believe she's been vacationing long enough, it's about time she actually tried to work some.

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  • FeedYourHeadMeg
    May 17, 2007

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    "Necessity has molded
    Them together, though
    They sometimes form a sort of
    Cleavage if you will." Ha! I find that quite humorous in a self-deprecating way, perfect.

    I also love "A delicacy! A fish-head,
    Served up with the eyes-" and "Oh love, I am split!" the most.

    The last 2 lines are powerful, and somehow uplifting and depressing at the same time lol. I love it!


  • rafika
    April 19, 2007
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    Your poem, especially the seductive one word title, has very direct emotional appeal. A lot of people will be able to relate to the theme. Meanwhile, some of your imagery is evocative while others don't make sense. The word choice, particularly the ending, is powerful and definitely catchy. The piece would benefit from spellchecking and less repetition.

    • HoldMe
      April 22, 2007
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      thank you so much for your comment on this!! i appreciate it a lot!!


  • I will stand by you
    April 19, 2007
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    very good write. Hope you keep up the good work.


  • Poetic-Dreamer
    April 2, 2007
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    This is really good honey. Age doesn't matter its what the words say as long as there there. I like how its chaotic and your title prepares us for that. You relate alot to the chinese japanese cultures and its really cool and kept me looking for where it showed.

    NoL

    • HoldMe
      April 11, 2007
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      Thanks a lot for the comment!! Hope you've been doin good!


  • calendar girl
    April 1, 2007
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    the style of this is great, and i liked your word choice too. great job! keep it up!
    :]
    alice

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