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Admitting the Disappointment







i am like mississippi
too hard for most to spell
so they don't bother with me




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I am a waste of time, pretty much. I don't know...lithium by Nirvana is a good song.

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  • TheCrazyBeautiful
    April 2, 2007

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    Ooh, I liked this. Interesting comparison, it's actually rather neat.

    Lithium is indeed a good song. Makes me want to listen to the 90's grunge chanel on Sirius radio...


  • lie
    April 1, 2007

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    I spell Mississippi all the time. I plan on naming my pet fish Mississippi. Only with a couple more ississ'.
    I have to agree that with your short poems, you seem to pack so much emotion into them. It'd be like putting three packets of PopRocks! in your mouth at the same time. Not only that, but it always seems so raw and real.
    I love the pyramid structure; it's clean and easy to read through and I think it's a very nice approach when writing shorter poems.
    Best of luck in the contest. YOU BETTER PLACE! and yes, that's a threat.


  • anima bella
    April 1, 2007
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    i love it.


  • singtherevolution
    April 1, 2007

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    Quite clever, I must say. I am amazed at your ability to express such a heart-wrenching emotion in only three lines. That's talent, right there.

    ("Lithium" is indeed a good song. I love how Cobain's songs feel like little snapshots into this disturbing and yet somehow completely understandable state of mind. It's a rare thing.)