He bore our cross, redeemed our home,
freed us from death, robed us in white.
Christ ransomed us; we are His own.
His glory and dominion known,
the Father’s Son, His pure delight-
He bore our cross, redeemed our home.
He left His glory and His throne
to cleanse us in God’s holy sight;
Christ ransomed us; we are His own.
The Lamb of God cursed and alone
wore stench of sin to cure our plight;
He bore our cross, redeemed our home.
“Into your hands” His final moan
God’s grace bestowed that day of night;
Christ ransomed us; we are His own.
On Easter Morn He crushed the stone;
bathed human hearts in holy light.
He bore our cross, redeemed our home,
Christ ransomed us; we are His own.
Joyce Josephson
Author notes
Form: Villanelle ~ written in iambic tetrameter
The stone the builders rejected
has become the cornerstone.
By the Lord has this been done
it is wonderful in our eyes.
This is the day the Lord has made
let us rejoice in it and be glad.
P s a l m 1 1 8 : 2 2 – 2 4
Whose love is more beyond the call of duty?
In a list
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Iambic tetrameters used reasonably well
although some stresses do fall on less important words.
This religious villanelle is formal, building on the Psalmist's text.
You have had something to say. This has been said well, in a disciplined form. It is always worth saying things that are obviously truistic for you.
Does one learn to feel differently or gain insight? Each reader will treat this question differently.
Thank you for your entry. Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Thank you for your helpful comment.
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I love that this message is wrapped and woven into a Villanelle. Wonderful job!
Paul
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absoloutly beautiful
I loved every word Heleft His glory and His throne
yes He did indeed and He too has risen . Its nice too read poems that speak of Gods glory in christ
he is our all sufficient Savior. I'm glad I stopped into to visit my poems need so much work and I put my trust in God and He has led me to this sight for reason I don't know exactley why but I know He has a purpse and a plan in everything we do. I am also a New Englander I read you were to in your profile.
Blessing's!
Sharon
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The Iambic Tetrameter works wonderfully in this Villanelle, and packs a much more effective punch
that the standard Iambic Pentameter would have had in this instance. A really terrific poem that was a pleasure to read. Best of luck in the contest.
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beautiful
This is a wonderful poem that I surely have learned from. Much luck in the contest!
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This is a wonderful poem and it is so true. "We are His own"
Thank you very much for your entry
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thank you so much for entering. Beautiful poem
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A beautiful Villanelle...I liked it when I first read it, and even more so now. Beautifully done.
Sam
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it is my pleasure to read such lovely words of praise for our precious Savior
Gorgeous
God bless you my friend...
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Thank you.
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wonderful wonderful! this is about the hope and faith we share in God. it's a beautiful write. He is our cornerstone still today. He is reject by some. it so great to see that this touches others through poetry. thank you for sharing your amazing talent. keep writing dear poet! God bless you always
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This is a great poem but I think once someone has the gold with it, they should not reenter unless it is a contest for gold trophy holders.
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That's fine. You can DQ it if you wish, or just not reward it.
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Overall, I like this.. It's very nice. I like the repetition of "he ransomed us." I think you did the form nicely.
The line, "“Into your hands” His final moan" bothered me just a little because "into your hands" isn't all of his final moan.
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Amen. Love the poem, love the page, love the message.
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Thank you.
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breathtaking!!!
He bore our cross, redeemed our home
Christ ransomed us; we are His own
I absolutely loved this work....thank you (f)
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Absolutely lovely!
Congrats on your previous wins - well deserved! This is a lovely Easter poem; please think of that for next Easter for our reading list. Well done!
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this reminds me of the gospel at church today.
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That's right, the Gospel did mention this psalm passage.
Thanks for you comment.
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well done
A lovely poem about our wonderful Lord who gave his sinless son to save our souls .What a savour good luck in the contest . -
Awesome Villanelle; thanks for your entry
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A lovely villanelle! Great title, ties in perfectly with your poem and scripture. The refrain of "Christ ransomed us; we are His own" is strong! Lovely page also.
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BEAUTIFUL. Congratulations on the gold trophy. An amazing Villanelle. Superb poetry. ~Pamela
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Thank you, Pam! Praise from a great poet is doubled!
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This is great. It certainly reads like an old hymn. I'm very interested that it's actually a Villanelle. Well done. Thank you.
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Thank you for the lovely comment and clappies, and for the gold trophy. I feel honored.
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new to this, but, i love anything expressed towards Jesus in a positive way....thank you for this refreshing expression of your love for Him......Drea -
Hmmmmmm.
Actually, you've done fairly well with this. I wouldn't use "stone" so soon after you used it in the previous line, but other than that, I don't see much that you really need to change. Have you checked out Poet's Market? There are a number of magazines that publish religious poetry and some of them are paying markets as well (meaning cold, hard cash instead of an author's copy.) -
Nothing against religious poems ...
but we don't publish them. I should have said no religious poems in the rules, but I forgot. I will go change that.
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If you want to DQ it, that's ok. I can't delete it myself, because it will remove it from my list. I understand from your page that you are an excellent writer, so if you have any critique you can give, I'd appreciate it.
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Very beautiful write.
An excellent tribute to our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ.
Thank you for your entry and Good Luck in the contest
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That is a very good poem
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This write is about hope and faith we share in God. This is beautiful write. It may of been wrote for Eater. It great to read any time of the year. Yes, he is our cornerstone still today He is reject by some. You have some nice reader comments. It so wonderful to see that it touched so many people. Keep up the great work. The title if very fitting t this write.
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Beautiful poem. Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Beautiful, faithful villanelle. Great job carrying the rhymes throughout the poem, none feel out of place. WEll done.s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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Thank you for your entry
Very heartfelt words and makes me think on Easter and what Jesus sacrificed for our sins. Lovely form poem. I am not by any means a authority on form poetry but I must say this was a good one.
Good luck
God Bless
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Awesome job.
This flowed with sincere passion and depth.
Good Luck in the contest.
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The stone the builders rejected, Praise God for Jesus, I will never reject HIM. He is my Savior and Redeemer. He is great and worthy of all our praise. This is wonderful write. I felt God's Spirit in this. You have done wonderful with it. Your Spirit flows straight from your heart and soul, you have painted these words of God with such color of Faith. Keep them coming and God bless you always.
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I knew you would like it. Thank you.
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I loved it and will be reading more soon my friend. YOu have much talent. God bless you and you are a blessing to have as a friend.
Tabitha
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This is really beautiful. Is this the type of poem that you put in your greeting cards? it should be. You've captured the essence of Easter and all that it means within this superb villanelle. Congratulations! x
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I have this poem on the front of my Easter Card, Bethan.
Behind is a photo of the sky with it's first hints of sunset.
The quote from Psalm 118 is on the inside, on the left. On the inside right is the greeting:
May your Easter be blessed with the knowledge that you are His.
Alleluia! He is Risen!
Happy Easter
Thank you all for your kind comments.
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a wonderful poem written for such a blessed season...thank you so much for sharing this. keep writing brother! God bless you always
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Actually, it's sister! Thanks!
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Haleleuia
What a wonderful poem. Telling what and how it happened and why we are the ransomed and redeemed. Happy and Blessed Easter.
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This is a beautiful villanelle. Written to uplift our precious Lord during the Holy week. Thank you for sharing it with us in this contest.
Sam
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Wonderful! A most beautiful Villanelle. I love the thoughts in this too. All the best in the contest.
Gaylene
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You did avery good job on this. It really captures the spirit of Easter!! Amazing!
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This is a great write. You have done a really good job with this one. Good luck in the contest, The Shaker
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Oh my goodness.. this is SOOOOO beautiful!!! The perfect Easter poem... the perfect message... about the perfect Gift...
This is lovely and something that I wish I had written... absolutely marvelous!!! Truly a magnificant poem, penned through words of such elegance and grace... awesome form, perfect meter and flow... a 10 clappie worthy piece for sure!!!
God bless you... thanks so much for entering Sam's contest... best of wishes to you in this contest!!!
~Melissa
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