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[Fade Away]

This life gets hard
Too many choices to make
Right or wrong?
(hard or easy)

Pop a pill
Ignore the pain
In time feeling fades
(fade away)

You cannot move
You cannot think
No more pain
(fade away)

This life gets hard
Too many choices to make
Right or wrong?
(hard or easy)

White bedsheets
White walls
White nurses
(fade away)

Flatline, brought back
In rehab, let out
Pop another pill
(fade away)

Author notes

Not as good as my usual, I apologize, but in its difference, I kind of like it,

Personal struggle, i hope you feel it

Let me know

B.Blair

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  • ConvenientExcuses
    April 9, 2007
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    just stopping by to applaud all entries, thanks for entering!

    -- side note...I didn't know which poem was yours until the end of the contest cuz they hide ap names from the contest editors...so great job! congrats on the honorable mention! =]

  • ConvenientExcuses
    April 1, 2007
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    I really like this. The emotion is definitely flowing through this piece. I thought the repetition of "fade away" was effective. I really liked the ending stanza:

    "Flatline, brought back
    In rehab, let out
    Pop another pill
    (fade away)"

    it summed up the poem quite well. thanks for entering and good luck!
    *ConvenientExcuses*