I take a long, deep breath
bringing you back to me
reliving my memories
I exhale…….
Until the next time I need you
You are gone
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marvelous
such an image of remberances, the eternity between a breath.
this is good real good thank you for this.
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WOW
A piece born out of a necessitated thing... breathing.
Excellent!!
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Hey! Lover of those short writes, this is splendid...sighs, brinks back a treasure of memories for me...the ending is the clincher and so true....and makes a statement about onesself and about the one who is gone...cherish the memories...awww...the yearning gets me everytime and can even smell the scent that lingers in the air....Magnificent!
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So much has been said here in a few short lines. You have captured an amazing feeling of yearning in this piece. I love that last stanza, such a powerful statement created using simple yet powerful wording. This was a joy to read. Keep up the excellent work. As always I am blown away by the beauty of your work.
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ohhh love this is amazing you have crafted your words in such an elegant way its utterly beautiful..ohh and the pics cracking too..well done this i abs love it xx
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DEEP SADNESS
I exhale...... Until the next time I need you You are gone
This touches my heart for you and your lose is felt deep...Love and peace go with you my sister
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It is good when we can call forth memories to help us get by in the present. I have done this. It can be very tricky though. Sometimes you can't let go of those thought processes and it does more harm than good. It sucks to truly miss someone. Thanks for sharing this. Enjoyed it as always.
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very to the point- sorta
This is a quick thought but, upon consideration, it is a thought which could speak (and ask) volumes. A wonderfully refreshing verse
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Methinks there's MUCH more to this than meets the eye. I'll refrain from elaborating, but I sense the sadness in this piece. Wishing you well always......
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