Patience is a virtue pure and true,
so I’ve learned, and heard it said;
Yet more than just a foolish few,
would have me seeing red.
I prefer to sit and speak with flowers,
insects, beasts and birds;
Than wait while minutes pass like hours,
beside a fool who’s loose with words.
Would rather run my earthly race,
up a mountain worth the climb;
Than share some space with a foolish face,
who knows naught of precious time.
Give me words from the thoughtful mind,
I’ll part with precious jewels sadly;
Considerate souls, both true and kind,
but I do not suffer fools gladly…
Feel free to comment..and please read my other work..
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Loved it! Great write!
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This poem is very descriptive and describes to me why I have no mindless social connections. Patience should not come into play when sitting with those who have loose tongues and small minds.
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The flow of this piece is awesome! And I love your write. You did a great job on it. I love your thoughts and the way you think on this one. Patience is definitely a virtue...you nailed it right on the dot with this write. Keep it up! You are amazing.
The One and Only...
~Lynn Jones
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Well Said!
Patients is a virtue, but there is always a time and a place for everything. I think you have penned that statement very well, and I enjoyed the rhyme which was very flowing and yet not very obvious like some of mine, lol.
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To feel the freedom of your time, spent with nature in mind...what a wonderful thought...children of the earth can stand alone in the woods, long before we can handle foolish noise of others...very interesting and creative view.
The flo9w is perfect and meaning strong...enjoyed it!
mystic
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Happy Moron
Behold the happy moron who doesn't give a damn;
sometimes I wish I were one,
Oh crap, perhaps I am!
"Naught" "suffer fools gladly"?? Methinks thoust cometh from the 17th century upon the currents of DaVinci's Time Machine!!
Just kidding. Thank goodness we are free to choose our company! Speaking with flowers and insects, though, strikes me as a bit odd, if not foolish. But then again, I have an enormous respect for St. Francis, so I'm probably WAAAAAY off base! Anyway, the main point seems worthy of verse, that time should be spent productively and we shouldn't waste it casting pearls before swine (in the vernacular of your day); so rock on!
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It sounds to me that patience is deep and rich in your heart for you will spend your time gladly doing what need be done to bring value into your life. You, just, have trouble waiting. Admitedly there are those who think that the more the world waits on them the more important they become. So I can understand your response. Nice use of structure.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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Overall this was really interesting. I have to disagree with the comment below mine... I didn't think this was cliche in the least, nor bland. I think that the second line in the second stanza is the only flaw, it doesn't flow with the rest.
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I found the rhythm of this piece basic and bland. The first line impression showed a lack of creativity by your cliched "Patience is a virtue".
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Overall, this is a nicely written poem. The message is loud and clear. Well done.
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Fantastic!
Very nice poem indeed. I liked your second stanza a lot..
I prefer to sit and speak with flowers,
insects, beasts and birds;
Than wait while minutes pass like hours,
beside a fool who’s loose with words.
Very good message..your imagery is excellent my friend..I am impressed great job
Amarige
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Glad to see I am not the only one who feels this way, was beginning to wonder if I am really the witch I'm claimed to be, simply because I can not stand idiocy. In other words...enjoyed the read!
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"who knows nothing of precious time"...it would keep the meter better. Other than the one suggesion, this is great! You should write something in about gormless fools who square their eyes in front of a television set or overuse computers. Great work!
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wonderful
Oh, this poem is really amazing...I liked it very very much! I should say it's a masterpiece!!!
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This is a very poetic way of saying that stupid people suck. LOL. I liked it
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This is stellar
You are a cut above -- two or three cuts above. One has to readjust one's thinking as to how to rate poetry so superior to the average here. Thank goodness you entered that Service, Kipling, and Noyes Contest. That is how I found you, looking for real poets like you.
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The title is pertinent to the poem,am unsure who d.p robertson is but believe I may have seen him around ap,perhaps the poet could provide a link to the inspiriation?I appreciate the plain background which affords the reader the full focus on words but perhaps leave a space between end of poem and page posted to afforrd the reader the liberty to linger longer on the poem? Perhaps Whos' /whose ? A precious usage of rhyme and alliteration.Indeed time is a perspective,man has seconded sixty seconds to every minute of matter but that is not finite,it either matters or does not matter,time is a perspective,the past is a perspective,the present is a truism yet over in a nanosecond and the future is an illusion that we we wish for ....
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I agree I read the interactions on your front page the other day, I was too annoyed to comment at that time and feared I might ramble pointlessly on and on. We are here to share what we write, and I will never understand how people feel that they are here to "tell" someone how to "improve" their poetry. If you write a piece and someone thinks it sucks and gives you all these "suggestions" to make it "better" and you take them and change everything, then it is no longer your own, written from your heart and by you, but now written for and by someone else to appease their taste. Or something like that
I feel that if you read something, you are entitled not to care for it, and also entitled to share that with the author in a respectful and considerate way, but we are not here to criticize style or individuality, who is anyone to say what's "right" and "wrong" when it comes to writing a poem? I will point out (very hesitantly) spelling and grammar errors (which are actually usually appreciated), but most of the time I will state what I did like about a piece, and if I didn't care for the content, I will leave a comment based on 'how' it was written, or no comment at all. I have told people if I thought something seemed off or didn't fit, but I always follow that up with, "that's just me" and always state that I would never ask someone to change their work, but I will offer suggestions if asked, but I'm not trying to change anyone or anything.
So anyway, blah blah, see....I was rambling, I tend to feel like I need to justify and explain myself...oh well.
You are very intelligent Mat, thank you for sharing this.
~Michele
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Very good
Thank u for sharing this reflective piece with us. I found it to be good be it in imagery and thought. Keep this u. Good day Mat. I thought of passing by to have a look at your work. God bless u.
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i love the title. excellent imagery and rhythmn to entire piece.
i really liked:
"Would rather run my earthly race,
up a mountain worth the climb;
Than share my space with a foolish face,
who knows naught of precious time."
wonderful sentiment right there. thank you sharing with us and keep up the writing.
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First thing I thought was "Ah yes...patience is a virtue...one I dont have"
I like this though, its beautiful, and it really shows how wonderful and simple peace can be.
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Nicely done. Being a fan of rhyme and meter this was an enjoyable read. The philosophy is also something I can relate to. A nice piece of work. Take care and HAve fun. Steve
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I loved the words to this poem. I'm not much of a commenter so if i sound stupid please for give me. I just think a simple "I loved it " is good enough.
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as you know, I'm not big on rhyming verse, but this one is very sensitive and tightly crafted. the flow trips up just a little in line 14, maybe one syllable too many? well done counselor.
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Awesome! I enjoyed this-- very witty and true.
--Mary Shannon
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Oh, how very true !!!
This is a really good piece. Congrats on the silver Mat. The flow of the piece is excellent and the rhyme scheme works really well. I think I enjoyed it so much though because it is so true.Oh, the fools who come into our lives and waste so much precious time. Really well done, this was a very refreshing read.
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I’d rather sit and speak with flowers,
insects, beasts and birds;
i would rather do that than anything. congratulations on the silver. though i do not know dp robertson well, i appreciate the writes i have seen of his. a fitting write for him. viyanna rosemarie
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Excellent piece, lovely rhythm and rhyme with wonderful thoughts and sentiment expressed, great work. Bunny
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what a lovely piece you have shared with us..
Being mindful of each and every moment is so very important to me ...
again another beautiful write..
thank you for sharing
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Nope... You Sure Don't
[wink]
So, you've 'heard it said', eh?
[chuckle]
Okay, knowing you as I do, I just had to chuckle after reading the first few lines. But I love this, Mat--absolutely love it! Seriously, every single word is a gem. You never cease to amaze me.
Others speak of your rythm and rhyme, and I agree; it flows near flawlessly. But the truth of it, is that this one speaks to my heart.
C'mon, let's go for a walk in the wood. I'll bring the Heineken and we can stay out 'til dark and howl at the moon.
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Dia duit Mat,
This is a poem close to me own heart,
i loved how it flowed and narated.
You are right about people wasting time
on the silly things in life.
We need to take a look at the beauty which surrounds
us, not the falsity we see in the mirror.
my favourite verse is...
"Give me words from the thoughtful mind,
I’ll part with precious jewels sadly;
Considerate souls, both true and kind,
I do not suffer fools gladly… "
Well said ma chara.
Slán Dolores xx
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Well done, rhyme scheme works so well. The message is well taken, so many do waste time with words spoken without thought. A great poem.
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"I’d rather sit and speak with flowers,
insects, beasts and birds;
Than sit where minutes pass like hours,
with a fool who’s loose with words."
You & me both, Brother. Sighhh...As they say, "Fool me once, shame on you. Fool me twice, shame on me." As for the Dr. Doolittle routine, I have been kissed on the cheek by a llama, had a wild mustang eat an apple from my hand, had deer in Yosemite National Park leave the people attempting to feed them just so I could take their picture, & had a chameleon crawl into my hand so I could take 'im outside, away from the cats that would have had 'im for a lovely afternoon snack... When I sat 'im in the grass, he started to run off, then stopped, looked back at me & slowly blinked his eyes, as if to thank me...Yeahhh, kids & animals are the way to go...Adults soon become insufferable... Another grand penning, my Friend...Good luck in Bunny's contest...
Wanda
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Well I am impressed, not only with the rhyme and rhythm but with the thoughts...fools waste our time so much but then we vote them in don't we lol, besides that a man of good judgement will always know when they've been fooled and when someone is sincere. Did I mention I often talk to animals and flowers lol Love, C
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