Lithium, What's wrong with me?
I feel I am being locked up inside,
Can't Hide my Emptiness,
I never wanted to Feel so Cold,
Here in My Darkness I thought I knew Myself.
Lithium, I want to Find a Light.
Out of this Sorrow,
Can't Break free until I let it go,
Don't want to Let it Lay me down this time,
Anything is Better than being alone,
Don't want to Forget how it Feels with out
Lithium, I want to stay in love with my sorrow,
I Always Find My Place among the Ashes.
Drown my will to Fly,
Is all you have done,
Keeping me Locked up inside.
Lithium, I Guess in the end I had to Fall
Come to Bed, Don't let me sleep alone,
I can't Hold on to me,
Darling I forgive you...
I'm gonna Let it Go....
Author notes
Option 3:
This one was Inspired by an Evanescence Song Called Lithium, I really Love Evanescence, Amy Lee is a Rock Goddess and Sexy hehe... but anyway yet another poem inspired by Evanescence...
A contest entry
- Bury Me In Black #2 (dark poetry) by EvenStarsBreak--x.
450 points, ended April 2, 2007, 25 entries
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Comments
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I love Amy Lee, too...she is a musical goddess and a gothic beauty...I love your take on the song, Seraphim ...
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Oooooh!
Amy Lee equals LOVE <3 Honestly, I would become a lesbian just for her
"Lithium" is my favourite song, too... I cried the first ime I heard it, because it reminded me of somewhere I had been in my life. Very well done, my dear!
Love and light always
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This is a really good write and I LOOOOVE AMY she is amazing. I went to a concert and they Rocked...great write and keep it up
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this is an awesome poem and im sorry that i hadnt commented on it till now. i am a bad daughter i promise i will read all of your work.
Picolla Ravan -
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Thank you my Piccola Rava and its okie... I love you and you are not a Bad Daughtet Never say that ....*hugs*
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i gotta say i do like this.
it dripz with emotion.
but to me it soundz too much like the song.
well, obivously, as it was inspired by the song, but i just think it could have been a bit more original...
yyeeeah. now that soundz insulting...sorry. my badd. i dunt mean it like that.
there were just clips and pieces. it made me feel like you just rearranged the song and threw in a few lines of your own.
anywayz. itz still a nice write.
Peace && Blesses
~Rain
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yeah I really do like this, but I have to say that this reminds me too much of the actual song. It's like you cut out the actual lyrics and put them in your own order and added a little yourself. I know that since it's inspired by the song, it's suppose to be alike, but this was a bit too much, I'm sorry to say. I didn't feel like this was your version of it
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i really like this... could be my love for Evanescence too... lol great write!!
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very sad, and powerful. I see youwon a silver for this? AMAZING! I think it should have placed gold, but CONGRATS! This poem deserved to win.
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lol thanks I really Love Evanescence
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Interesting line: I want to stay in love with my sorrow". That's ironic. . . A dark poem inspired by a dark song. It's really good. You've captured loneliness and I think self-pity (from that line: I want to stay in love with my sorrow") in resplendent words. The question "what's wrong with me" adds more emotions. Great poem. Applaud worthy.
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very well done my friend and such dark and lingering images you have created ...I Must say BRAVO!!!
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I love this ... im also a huge fan of amy lee...yes mucho sexi ! hehe
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Yum....Amy Lee is a rock goddess
I love her....
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tlk to the litheum and it will guide u...just like ketsup...
...anyho, this wuz a good poem and i liked it...thanx for entering -
It sounds like your talking to the lithium? But I liked it none the less. How you express the emotions and use descriptive words. Ohhh the third stanza was wonderful. I loved that. It's an excellent poem. Goodluck&&thanx for entering!
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awesome.
"Don't want to Let it Lay me down this time,
Anything is Better than being alone,
Don't want to Forget how it Feels with out
Lithium, I want to stay in love with my sorrow,
I Always Find My Place among the Ashes."
Was my favorite part... good job and thanks for entering my contest. -
Very nice strong write. It flows very soft and seductively as one reads it, but the undertones are very understood.
Cleverly written and ndone weel to the tone of the band that inspiried it.
Read it three times and enjoyed each the more.
Thanks for sharing.
Best to you, dear poet.
mystic
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Nicely Done
This piece is nicely done. Such a captivating write indeed. Well done. I like Evanescence as well.
Keep writing
Love Your Ap Aunt
Countrybabe
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This is awesome, you have done a wonderful job in penning this, thankyou for sharing with me, Bella
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I love it as always a wonderful poem! So beautiful and so haunting. Very well done!!!
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