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One Eye At A Time

As I struggle to make a pretty picture
All I concoct is an ugly mixture
Reflection as a whole isn't worth a dime
That is why I apply my mask one eye at a time

The person that is begging to be released
Has been taken over by an ugly beast
The skull of death shows what's in my mind
That is why I apply my mask one eye at a time

I long to just return to where I came from
But my reflection reminds me of what I've become
It hurts me those memories of a happier time
That is why I apply my mask one eye at a time


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acytra is my AP name
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  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 23, 2007
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    Well written piece. Succinct, with good meaning, and rhyme. Love the pic also!


  • Namita
    July 21, 2007

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    This is a good poem. It speaks of a mask, but your feelings are very well expressed. Good job with this poem. I congratulate you on the silver you have obtained and wish you good luck in this contest.

    Luv,
    Candy
    Contest Holder


  • bhaase02
    June 28, 2007

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    i love this poem because it's easy to relate to. hiding your pain. had to tell you i admire the honesty.


  • intanglio2ring
    May 21, 2007

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    An unveiling of a mask - showing the hidden side - an intimate portrail of what we all do to enter the public eye!
    Thanks for your entry into my contest & Good Luck!
    Tang


  • TexasMomma
    May 20, 2007

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    Very nice poetry,nice rhyming and great flow,I like the way you make it understood that you are kind of afraid of the happier times,I can realate to this!Keep up the great work!


  • PoetBoy2008
    April 18, 2007
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    I loved the description you put into your poem it was really deep i think was really good.

  • Sweet musings
    April 5, 2007
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    THAT GRAPHIC REALLY GOT ME. AS I WAS READING THIS IT KEPT POPPING UP IN MY SIGHT. LOL. I LOVED THIS POEM. THE TITLE WAS PERFECT. FLOWED SO EASILY... YOU DID A GOOD JOB. "That is why I apply my mask one eye at a time." THAT IS A VERY COOL LINE AND I LIKED SEEING IT AT THE END OF EACH PARAGRAPH.


  • InkedHands
    March 31, 2007

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    wow. I love this, it flows very well without having the rhyming feel too forced. And the repeating line makes it all come together as one. I also can't stop wacthing the graphic.

    • acytra
      March 31, 2007
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      Thank you

      for the wonderful comment and applause. I may revise the middle stanza....I also keep looking at that graphic...I had another picture that I wanted to add in, but I really couldn't figure out how to get it in there. It is an eye with a child that has it's arms reaching out....very chilling...I wanted to add it around the last stanza. This is a very real feeling for me....I have said for years taht I can't look at my face even to apply makeup, unless I apply it one eye at a time. Thank you for this contest and for letting me express myself through your idea. I thank you again so much for reading and commenting.

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