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Through a Citizens Eyes

I look around,
And see broken bodies.
They litter dirt roads,
They fume in scorching heat.
Everywhere I go, the smell of them follows.
A sickening, rotting flesh, putrid smell.
It lingers throughout the remains of the village,
Haunting all who inhabit the ruble.

Dozens lay dead among the streets,
Men, women, children;
No particular gender nor race.
Just one community,
disheveled by its government;
Held together by its neighbors.

Today I see my assistant
Among the masses of new bodies.
My heart weeps at the sight of him.
Only partially clothed, his bones are easily seen.
He was a hard worker, a family man,
He had a lovely wife, and three children.
I shudder to think what became of them.

A few feet down I see a women drop to her knees,
Her arms on top of a dead mans chest.
Its hard to determine her age;
This man could be her brother, or father,
Or maybe even a son or husband,
Cut down in his prime.
I feel tears stream from my eyes as I watch her,
And think of the pain she must face.

But then again, isn't that what we all are facing?
Hunger, exhaustion, separation, death?
It was once that hope held this village together,
Before, that is, the army took over.
Before we found no aid would come.
Before we saw our loved ones killed beside us.
Before we knew we were next.

This is the typical village in Darfur,
The large population cut down to unbelievable numbers,
Where food is scarce, and often fought over.
Where finding a piece of bread is both a miracle and a nightmare,

You can be killed for that piece of bread, by both your neighbors and the army.
Sleep too rarely knocks on our door,
For fear that while we sleep, the army will attack.
It has happened before, and shall again.

We have no defense.

Countries all over the world see this,
And instead of helping, continue watching.
Only watching.
Some are at war in other places,
unnecessary wars I may add.
While others are in fear of helping,
Afraid for their own lives.
Who can blame them?

In order for us to fight,
We need the strength.
We need men who can stand,
And those men are few.
Most have been weakened to their knees with starvation.
Some with disease, some with grief, some with nothing but fear.
We have not an army to defend us,
To take back our village.


And so I stand here
In the middle of this street,
Smelling the rotting flesh,
Hearing the cries of suffering,
Seeing the grim reaper himself.
Has death come for my village?
Or will there be a miracle,
And help will finally come?
I can only hope to live so long.

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  • LadyInRed55
    June 4, 2007
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    Breath taking

    Tear jerker. And Oh so sad yet the bitter truth!!
    I understand why you won 1st place!!
    Thanks!!!

  • Revwilliamfoos
    May 14, 2007
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    very good

    thanks for entering
    love the papa


  • lust in a grenade
    May 13, 2007
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    nice imagery it definetly paints a very vivid mental image of evil goverements

  • Aurora Ceres
    May 7, 2007

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    Absolutely amazing. Thats really all I can say. You know the drill....well written....perfectly to the heart of the matter....no messing around.....the depth of your soul amazes me.....more than worthy of the win and best of luck to you in the other contest as well.

  • Revwilliamfoos
    May 7, 2007
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    very good

    so we all shall stand...
    thanks for entering
    love the papa


  • alco
    May 6, 2007

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    POWERFUL

    awesome write...very thought provoking. it was like a story i wanted to keep on reading, but was afraid to at the same time. you definately put alot of thought and feeling into your writing, and it shows. you, my friend, are very talented...monica


  • DarkHunter
    May 6, 2007

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    Lost for words here, what a powerful write. It was like listening to a true account from a person that is actually there right now. This is deep and very sad. We hear stuff in the news all the time but there is so much that gets left out. So many places out there need our help and they just don't get it. Thank you for sharing this and good luck in the contest. James.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 2, 2007

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    I add my breath to your breath

    I'm crying yet again..You took a good strong stance..
    A powerful message..Let's not stop until the day of justice dawns.


  • Jeneralix
    April 2, 2007

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    Eye-Opening

    This has sooo much description that I can actually see this in my head. It brings out a lot of emotions and I like the viewpoint that you wrote it in. It makes it more real and living. The last stanza touched my heart. The movie, Invisible Children, is pretty much about the same thing. Excellent beyond words write! I love it!
    <3 Jenerali


  • Cannonsfire
    April 1, 2007

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    AWESOME!

    This my dear girl is Brilliant!!! I get so angry when I think of the government and what they have done, there is no excuse for genocide, but corruption has many faces in Africa, I am on my way to Africa myself, am in NZ on stopover first, then to Botswana to help in an aids orphanage, I cry when I think of how the world ignores them. Read my author's page and you'll see why I do what I do. You keep that powerful pen going, you are the generation who can make them listen, use your voice and use that pen

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