[White powder]
r_u_n_s through my ~~~veins~~~
+..hoping..+ it will take a
w
a
y the %%pain%%
will {God} have no %%grace%% for me?
my love !!burns violently!! within
%%Cocaine%% has [no power] to ...heal...
the %%panic%% ++reigns++,
??What can I do??
I see my daughter %%d..a..n..c..i..n..g%%
%%pretty in pink%%
she *~sparkles~* with her
faux %%d+i+a+m+o+n+d+s%% and %%r+u+b+i+e+s%%
like a %%~~princess~~%%
my son, his l.i.t.t.l.e f.a.c.e
so [sweet and innocent]
I [hold] the image in my.... ^head^
as they are `t
a
k
e
n from my grasp`
%%depression%% overtakes me
[induce me to a %%coma%%]
[[I pray]]
and leave me be
%%alcohol%%
((drugs))
!!nothing helps!!
[the end is near]
[[I hear it]]
%%scratching%% violently in my head
~^there is no other way^~
{it says}
%%suicide%%
will take me away
from the [[[insanity]]] of self-hatred
^guilt and hopelessness^
as I write ~~words of love~~
and {prayers} to my %%religion%%
the %%knife%% of [[[[violation]]]]
[its dull edge]
[[eats away at me]]
{what I thought was}
{{was not}}
I am %%pushed over the edge%%
and [in an instant]
[[my body is limp]]
as %%blood%% ^spills from my chest^
a %%mutilation%% of my ^mortality^
[my last decision]
leaves me with
[no other choices]
%%Amen%%
Author notes
This is not about me, and now that I read the contest rules it's not pretty dirty, either, but it's what I was inspired to write from the word list in the contest, so for that, thanks! To my friends, know that I am not in a state of depression or angst over this, I was just finally inspired to write something and it felt good, maybe an obsession with suicide and not understanding it, I dunno, but I'm sure my fart poems will once again reappear and all will be good in the world...
In a list
A contest entry
- ♥With her mouth sewn shut...her eyes began to scream...♥ by requiempoet.
370 points, ended April 7, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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My favorite line:
"Depression overtakes me
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I really liked the poem.
It could have done with a little less punctuation because it made it confusing to read but i really did like it. -
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I don't even remember writing this... haha! It was some attempt at dirty-pretty, which I overdid (like you said!).
Thanks for visiting MaidMarion, and your comment, and for leading me back to a poem I had completely forgotten.
Write on!
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wow, for dirrty pretty, this is a bit, extreme, the punctuation, is a bit over done... and the topic is a little off, but thats, okay, I can tell its your first, and we all have to learn. If you ever need any advice on how to write dirrty pretty, or want to see some examples you can check out my page, or come ask me, IM always ready to help a new soul dip into this acid laced fairytale I now call home =P
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Haha! Yeah, that would be me, if you do something OVERDO it.
And, yep, I have no idea what I'm doing, just looked at a couple of samples, so need to find more information on the specifics. Thank you for visiting, brokenwindupdoll, and for the honest feedback and suggestions. I will check out your page for more examples.
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awwwwwwwwwww!!! That's a great first dirty pretty!!! Congrats darling
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Cool! I will work on the rest of it later, it sure takes some thinking and time to get it done. Love you!
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I'm going to be picky and ask that you dirty pretty it up really really well...
add a few (( )) or !! !! or type in dirty pretty poems in google and it should supply you with the information you need... -
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Hi Rosita Bonita! Can you tell me to the point of "taken from my grasp" how this looks? Totally new to this, so let me know how that looks. No need to worry about me winning awards, so say whatever to help me through this, k? Thanks! Momma Bella
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I have to come back to it, I think the <> signs removed some text... ack! But, I have to leave now, so will come back to it tonight. Mwah!
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Oh, that's what I get for assuming what dirty pretty was, with your writing style I thought it was the type of writing (sexual and sensual kind of thing), silly me for not looking at one of the examples. I think I can do that!
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LOLOLOL I love you Ms. Kim, even know I'm not suppose to know you wrote it... you used my word bank well sweetheart!!! and dirty prettys...either you love them or you hate them!
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Haha... how'd you figure me out?
Thank you for the inspiration, Rosita Bonita, and I hope you enjoy your contest! Momma Bella
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