Life goes steadily steadily
Lovers come and go
And we want to stop
But life ignores us
Steadily steadily
Our heart thumps steadily steadily
It never tires, never
Not even if we command
It to it beats
Steadily steadily
Until the day we want
it
to
And then
It
falters
Like a machine
on the blink
We don't want it
to but
It slows and
ignores us yet again
Until
it
stops
Please tell me what you think
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Oh. This is an interesting poem that you have here.
I picked up what you were doing with the repetition on this poem. It was supposed to be like a heart beat, right? And then the lines got slower and slower, like a heart that was slowing down? Lestways, that's what it sounded like to me. I thought that was pretty good. You did a nice job with this.
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