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I Miss.......

I miss that you were always there
All the good times that we had
I miss the man that picked me up
Whenever I was feeling sad

I miss that we could always talk
No matter what or when
I miss that you showed me how
It was ok to fall in love again

I miss being able to call at night
When I was too scared to sleep
I miss the trust I had for you
That was in-grained in me so deep

I miss the man, my best friend
And the person he used to be
But most of all I miss the fact
That he used to want to talk to me

Author notes

Option #3

I wrote this for Ron, my best friend. We are slowly putting the pieces of our FRIENDSHIP back together after all that has happened! I love you Ron! You have been, are now, and always will be my best friend! (Even though we can't be more)And I'm always here for you no matter what!

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  • The Hidden Darkness
    July 29, 2008

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    I am here now

    WOW i am in this situation right now, except it's with a girl. This was awesome, I completely knew how this felt!


  • forever dreaming
    April 1, 2007

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    I feel that this is a poem straigh from the heart but something about the rhyme and flow put me off it slightly. Despite the genuine emotion being shown throughout I feel that the rhyme needs to be tightened somewhat in order for the flow to be improved. I sincerely hope you don't take any offence by my comment, it is merely my opinion and I am sure if you showed this to him he would greatly appreciate it. Well done on a great effort and thank you for entering.


    • DenyMyLove
      April 1, 2007
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      Thank you for your comment!!!! Of course I'm not offended, as long as it's constructive critisism it's great! Now if you would have been all harsh like "this sucks, you suck" then that would have been offensive! Thank you for the comment and I will see what I can do about the flow. It was a kind of spur of the moment write.
      ~DAWN~


  • Alilly silver member
    March 30, 2007

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    This is a very heartfelt poem. I could feel your pain through your words. I enjoyed the flow and the theme of this piece as well. Although a bit sad, there is so much meaning woven in. I hope it all works out for you. Alilly


    • DenyMyLove
      March 30, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your awesome comment!!!! It may take some time, but, I know that our frienship is too great to ever completly fail!!!!
      ~DAWN~

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