I've been waiting...
waiting for you to come into my life
to show me you're the one
I've been seeking
willing to take the chance
to go into the world
to find you...
The one I wish to love
so I did
stumbling into your arms
by faite
knowing I found someone special
with one whisper of your voice
knowing, feeling
It was truly love
many years later
marriage came
tears fell as I listened to his secret
a deadly secret
one month to live,one month to love
embracing him tightly
not wanting to let go
giving him all my love
hope for him a second chance to live
Weakening...
knowing few moments remain
praying and wishing
the day comes
as we lay in bed
I hold his hand...
telling him I love him
tears dripping
he mumbles I love you too
fading slowly...
we kiss one last time
Author notes
Written July 9th, 2003
A contest entry
- Your best prewrite by glazecovered.
300 points, ended February 23, 2004, 274 entries
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thanks for your comment
hannah -
Very sad and moving...somewhat cliche, but then again with so many love and death poems out there it's hard to stay original...Actually I felt that the last two lines were much stronger than the rest of the poem. Great job nonetheless. Thank you for entering and good luck.
~Anastasia -
is that tru sory if it is
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thank you very much i apriciate that hehe
~Hannah~
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oh wow this is deep! its really sad! your extremely talented for being 11! I like this! its sooo sad
great job!
Maddy -
i think thats how its supposed to be i think thanks a lot for your comment
~Hannah~
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Wow!!!!
Another GREAT piece!!!!!!!!
So sad and heart felt....
You might just fix the little typo "by faite "
Great work!!!!
WELL DONE!!!!
Best Wishes
~Tracey~
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thanks a lot for your comment
love yeahz 2
~Hannah~
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awwwww so sad, but great! love yeaz~shorty
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lol your welcome thanks for commenting ill try to keep up my great work lol
well ttyl
~Hannah~
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Do Not Touch It!
*tEaR*dRoP*~I swear I felt this poem hit the center of my heart..i mean for real..it hit ROCK BOTTOM..maan it was DEEP..and I just felt it..so much pain in this poem..so sad..*one*last
and then all you can do is pray for him 2 go 2 heaven..soo sweet and so sad..like so sweet cuz u care and love so much..yet sad that he'll be gone soon..Man thanx soo much for sharing...Made me think really *DEEPLY* about *LOVE*! Great poem! Keep up the good work!
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I liked this one a lot. It was very moving. I'm glad that it isn't true. one typo jumped out at me... faite should be fate. Good luck.
Patti -
thamks a lot ill add you to if i see more i like from you ok?? see you later
~hannah~
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this is an amazing poem!! the transition from happy to sad is very suttle but effective. great job on this one! also, thanks for your comments on my work. i look forward to reading some more of your peices. i will be adding you to my faves list!! thanks again!
take care,
mollie
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YEAH I KNOW ITS SAD LOL NO ITS NOT A TRUE THING I MADE IT UP I DONT KNOW WHERE I THOUGHT IT UP AT BUT I DID AND I HOPE I WIN
~HANNAH~ /F -
Aww!
That is so so sad!
I really hope this isnt a personal experience...
That would be so heartbreaking.
Wicked write.
Good luck in the contest!
- Shay
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