Those things you put on
Our childhood you took
Those fake smiles you make
What you do when they don't look
My eye is bound to heal
The bruise won't last long
You hide these things
Yet we've been proof all along
You locked up our secrets
Your hiding place too
I know why you do this
You thought they knew
They found out the things
You tried to hide
But it wasn't so fun
When one of us died
The people they cry
They tell us you did us wrong
You beat each one of us
When mommy was gone
A contest entry
- Bury Me In Black #2 (dark poetry) by EvenStarsBreak--x.
450 points, ended April 2, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow! This is a really moving piece. You did an ecxellent job displaying the feelings and picture in this piece. Keep up the great work!
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i love this piece. i am a victim of child abuse and i fully appreciate this piece. good rhyme. great choice of words. excellent construction and layout. "My eye is bound to heal The bruise won't last long You hide these things Yet we've been proof all along" is my faveourite stanza. good things come from your mind. keep up the good work. keep it real and take care of yourself.
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Thank You. I hope everything is going a lot better for you now.
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wow
Wow barney, this is really good.
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