I still search for your heart across the miles,
Across the years, across the pain and the tears.
I drift along, waiting for the moment when we meet again,
When our hearts beat again, at the sight of each other.
I now love another with all my heart, but I still linger,
Looking for the beat of your heart, traces of a love long past.
I am sorry for leaving you, but it was the right thing to do,
But as I said then, I will always love you, and do even today.
So I still walk the haunts of my mind, searching for the heart,
The heart that was untrue, the heart that tore mine apart.
But I linger here and there, waiting for that moment,
Waiting for the tears to fall again, as before, for you.
Author notes
Option #4
A contest entry
- 8 options of madness by McFairy.
2000 points, ended June 2, 2007, 44 entries
Honorable mention
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VERY BEAUTIFUL!! I loved it and can relate so well. I think it was penned wonderfully. You did a fantastic job. Excellent job with tthe contest. I hope to be reading more of your writings in the near future.
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Wow! This is sadly beautiful.
"So I still walk the haunts of my mind, searching for the heart,
The heart that was untrue, the heart that tore mine apart." Those line especially are amazing. This poem is very well written, and well deserving of the wins. Great job, and thanks much for sharing. Blessings, Patty
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Sad poem but appears deep and honest as were your thoughts
Best wishes and thank you for sharing with us
Julie -
I really enjoyed reading this and the picture is wonderful too. Thank you for posting in our contest.
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I think I'll search for his love and heart forever, even though I know things really can never be the same as they used to be. Beautifully written, love the picture as well. I feel your heartache and pain, because I live it myself at the moment.
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This is lovely
Nice work that says I love you, but I cant live with the pain I hold. Still there is a place in this life waiting to accept you. Nit-cliche. I still like it.
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Good
This is surely a good poem, but...there's something about it that makes it difficult for me. I think you use too many cliche phrases, like "I will always love you" that make this seem uninteresting. However, lines like 1, 2, and 9 bring the poem back to life. Overall a good write.
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I like it. It's deep and emotional. Good Job
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pretty good
i liked this poem but to me your overall idea was scattered. could you try to possibly make it more clear?? -
it is a very good poem with love and saddness all the right things, good job and good luck
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
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Nice Job
It has EXCELLENT FLOW! Good luck in the contest~ This one already won a silver and well deserved ~ So I wish you the best of luck to try for the Gold~ Good luck in this contest! -
ohh i love the picture.. great poem with amazing imagery well done and good luck to you in the contest xxx
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I know this will come across so badly, I really don't mean for it to....to me, it makes no sense to say 'I now love another with all my heart, but' and then a few lines later to say 'I will always love you, and do even today'.....It's kind of like using a double negative...You either love the new one with all your heart, or...well, or you're not....Just doesn't make sense in writing form...I know we do that emotioanlly...after all it's human nature....we love and move on...and no matter how hard we try....there are some we cannot let go of all the way. Other than that one little issue( and yes, it's my issue!)....I do love this! Really!
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good job
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awwwwwwwwwww
The sadness just oozes from this poem. It's easy for me to put myself in your place in this poem. I've not found another love, but I've recently departed from one whom I adore with all my heart. I can see myself in this exact place in the future. Sad poem, but one that I know I'll remember for a long time.
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how sad. to love two people at the same time is torture. i know first hand what you are saying within these words you have expressed. thank you for sharing your talent with me and good luck in this contest we both have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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wow
This is absolutely beautiful, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, thank you so much for entering my contest.
***Strangeangel***
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I think a lot of people can relate to this piece and I like that (among other things) about poetry. Wonderful work and wonderful imagery on this piece. Good luck in the contest
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Aww Yes,
I can relate to this write, been there and had those same emotions.
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First of all, the picture you coupled with this poem is lovely. I think it really helps set the tone for the poem. There's a lot of emotion in these lines, and it's feelings that I am all too familiar with. This poem really spoke to me, and I think you did a wonderful job expressing longing and regret for lost love. Good luck in the contest. >pixxie<
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