Blood moon
beauty too wondrous to be tainted with horrid howls
once bloomed Eden
now a garden of ravaged corpses
a mistaken waste land
the height of civilization
dons the ego in haughtiness
their subversive right to predaciousness
turns a blind eye to myths
where humans
become prey
darken night frights
as golden eyes peer as I feel a distant glare
deep within the woods
I begin to stalk eerily my heart beat quickens
until a sound is heard
from the cracking of twigs
anticipation excites me fear slips in and grips me
my muscles convulse until my body freezes
what is that smell
the sweet aroma is it the stench
of flesh and blood
the florescence of the autumn moon
glistens off my fur revels a ghastly beast
my senses awaken tonight terror reflects in my eyes
as I pounce in full flight as I scream into the sky
These are the nights...
under the hunters light
where the scent excites my hunger
and blood drips of my canines
in satisfied desire
Author notes
Writtin in the "Symmetrical Antonyms" style created by Darc Raven , read the first part well, first, then when you get to the center, read the red / yellow down, then the blue / yellow down, then finish with the orange at the bottom.
Let your darker side give in
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark and Fantasy Options by Shade Aurelia.
650 points, ended April 20, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please applaud if you think it worthy, thanks.
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I had not heard of 'Symmetrical Antonyms' but 'wow' what a delightfully complicated form. Congratulations on your
ingenious creation and on the silver as well--
You would have taken gold from me.
Thanks for sharing
~Pastel
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good write, not as dark as I would hope, but along the right path.
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Very nice write, i felt the anticipation build up with each scentance. And the way the pem was set up made it all the more enjoyable.
Thanks for entering my contest
Never stop writeing -
This was an interesting piece. It was good. I liked the flow and images in the poem. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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Very interesting. Some parts terrifying, others just a little bit here and there, but completely terrifying the reader ruins the work, so you have done a great job.
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Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You had my heart beating with fear!!!! No, really this was a fabulous story/poem!!! It is filled with excitement and an suspense with every line all the way to the end. You do these types of pieces very well Jacen!!!It is not anyone who can captivate and keep the reader on the edge of seats until the very end. I also love the format you ased very unique ties it all together quite nicely!!!!BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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Very well done! Nice strong fantasy write. Deep insight into the life of a weverwolves. Strong imagery and nicely dark. You do a wonderful job with fantasy writes. Keep up the good work.
Love,
mystic
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good job, bro. i know i've already told you i liked it, but still.. lol.
you really use the Symmetrical Antonyms quite well... maybe even better then me (which isn't good because i made that style, lol). you continue to amaze me, with every write you produse.
good luck and great job
~yeah, you know who ^^ lol.
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I love it.
Werewolf without the direct saying "I am a werewolf!"
This is wonderful!
I love it...
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ill be adjusting the colors for blood moon, the center portion of the poem is meant to be read as two poems, and I need my bro who is a Gold member to edit the colors properly for the center portion to be read more clear, glad you enjoyed the poem, just wanted to make sure you knew what style i was using, its like two poems in one, reading on the left and center going down, then on the right and center going down, such as this:
darken night frights
as golden eyes peer
deep within the woods
I begin to stalk eerily
until a sound is heard
from the cracking of twigs
anticipation excites me
my muscles convulse
what is that smell
the sweet aroma
of flesh and blood
the florescence of the autumn moon
glistens off my fur
my senses awaken tonight
as I pounce in full flight
then start agian from the right down.
anyways ill try to get colors fixed soon, it will be much cooler
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oooh, I like how you did the layout. Very creative. And the imagry expressed was excellent. Very good. Good luck.
Shade
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