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Let Her Go

There is one woman that I love and she is so beautiful with her beautiful brown hair that is so soft it is like touching a kitten’s fur, her brown eyes that shine, they could light up any dark room, I swear I could see her eyes from China, her skin is so soft, flush, and luminous put her in the darkest room she will light it up like sunlight shining through a window, she is the most beautiful woman I've ever seen, to me she is the most beautiful woman in the world, there is only one problem she is my best friend, I've asked her out about four or five times and each time she told me she doesn't like me in that way, yeah I may be depressed every day but I also look forward to seeing her beautiful face every morning, I swear she is one of the only people keeping me sane, she knows I love her I've told her several times, but I stopped telling her because it wasn’t doing any good she use to flirt with me all the time and now it is rare if she flirts with me but that doesn’t really matter anymore I’m just glad I get to see her every day, I love her so much, I told her that if I really love her then I would let her go and I have, I realized that we both have to move on it is probably the best for the both of us, I know I would most likely make her happy, and I think she knows too, but she doesn’t like me in that way so it is time for me to let her go, maybe I’ll find someone else but then again maybe I won’t, but maybe later she will realize just how much I love her, almost every minute of every day since I’ve known her I dream about her, maybe later on she will give me a chance, but for now I’m letting her go, I may try later on, but I don’t know, maybe later on in the future I will be the last person to ask her out if you catch my drift, you never know what the future holds because the future is not written in stone, and anything is possible if you just try hard enough.

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  • Lord Viceroy
    April 8, 2008

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  • wolfcub
    September 12, 2007

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    This was so sso so hard to read. But worth it.
    Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
    Katie


  • forget my memories
    September 12, 2007

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    this was a very well writen piece thank you for entering my contest and once again i am so sorry for the time it has taken me to juge this contest i had some personl things come up and i could not get to a computer. Thank you for waiting. Good luck,

  • Virgoan
    September 2, 2007

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    Narrative in its simple and good rendition.

    Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.

    >>>VIRGOAN


  • Lillian Rose
    July 2, 2007

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    I liked the format of the poem it was really different I just don't think it flowed to well. I do like that you included coma's into this but I think some parts would have sounded better with periods. When I read poetry I read it outloud to get the full effect, coma's means you take a breath while periods mean you can pause. I would read the poem outloud and see if there is anything you want to change about it to make it easier for the reader to follow and the flow to flow easier. I do love the emotion you put in this write though! Thank you for entering this into my contest and best of luck!


  • Flames-of-Furey
    June 19, 2007

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    I'm not sure if the format you have chosen has done this poem justice. it makes the flow of your words really choppy and hard to read.

    I really like your message and the emotion of being fed up is definately conveyed. I thought though that I was reading a letter or some diary that you have just formatted to look like a double line verse.
    It comes accross as long winded for what you are trying to say you could say this in less words and really give it impact without explaining to me that e.g. the tree is very green. you have taken away all mystery and plot form your piece and it is a shame becasue I liked your key words
    Thanks for entering


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 11, 2007

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    Please pass the tissues tears flowing here this is so heart breaking to me a love that just can not be ...lose of a deep need this is so well written and emotional thank you so much for sharing and entering;f


  • arafura gold member
    June 10, 2007
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    I get your drift...

    Lovely prose. Just go and tell her man!

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Ignis Corpus
    June 8, 2007
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    yeah I may be depressed every day but I also look forward

    to seeing her beautiful face every morning, I swear she is one of the only people

    keeping me sane, she knows I love her I've told her several times those lines.... they are idono perfect. im glad you entered, i loved it and good luc


  • bensbabygurl
    June 6, 2007
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    good

    i love you too yeckers. yes people that poem is about me


  • Stevie17Marie
    May 10, 2007

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    I think it is very good lots of emotion and thats what i love good job and good luck in my contest

    stevie aka txangel10


  • animated lies
    April 26, 2007

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    Hmm... not very poetic but the emotion is definitely there. Thank you for entering my contest.

    Au revoir et bonne chance.
    -animated ♥

  • demongod666
    April 3, 2007

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    nice

    damn i've heard of pourin your heart out but i didn't think that you loved kita that much. talk about things that will give you a shock. keep those poems comin yeck. your doin good. now i want you to read my newest poem ANGER OR JEALOUSY.

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