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My Eyes

My eyes rest upon yours,


Down into the depths of forever I fall.
No scream accompanies my descent,
Just a sigh of tranquil dizziness.
My hands find your beauteous face,
Trembling with wonder they absorb the reality of you.
Caught in awe of this sensuous fusion, delicate fingers urge on.
Our stare still unbroken, as I caress your soft meandering crown.
My heart plays out a symphony,
From which Love pours from every note.

Wonder continually grips me,

“What dream is this, in which I find?
Your touch, once trapped within my mind”

Awash with ease I drift on contented air.
Lay my head against you as a smile escapes me.
Our breathing slowly and steadily unifies.
Now peacefully acquainted, our arms find comfort in a utopian hold.
Curiosities touching on heaven at once are gratified and soothed.
Your immediate presence engulfs me until I find myself overwhelmed with adoration.
Two Hearts fulfilled

Time ceases to exist

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  • whispering shadow
    June 29, 2007
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    very touching i think
    confused because i can't tell if its love or lonelieness


    • Applehead
      June 29, 2007
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      hhmm what makes you think loneliness? Touching is spot on after all the poem is all about the sensuality of long awaited touch.

  • tina12345
    May 23, 2007

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    hi my name is tina and i really like how you wrote this poem keep up the good work dear poet and i am interested on reading more of your poems when i get the chance too when you have the chance too please feel free to take a look at my poems and commented on them please and thanks and hope to hear from you soon take care.

    • Applehead
      May 30, 2007
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      Hello :)

      Thank you so much for your positive feedback.Im pleased you like it and when i get the opportunity i shall check out your work

  • paintitblack1001
    May 7, 2007
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    i totally like this a lot. this is a great write. good luck in the contest!

  • TeChNoWC
    May 6, 2007
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    Ooops nearly forgot hehe


  • TeChNoWC
    May 5, 2007

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    One of your best

    A moment like this is a true wonder... I only hope one would return the sentiment, at that special time

    I like how you placed the fourth paragraph in quotations, as if you were saying it aloud.

    The words are pure and strong, they create an experience, easy to picture yet surreal all at once

    Great write Apple,

    mwa

  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    May 3, 2007

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    another part i like

    Your immediate presence engulfs me until I find myself overwhelmed with adoration.
    Two Hearts fulfilled

    Time ceases to exist

    this part too is lovely...

    • Applehead
      May 3, 2007
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      Thank you :)

      So glad u like it. I have sent a response to your chat question through im.

  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    May 3, 2007
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    WHY only 3 applauses for a GREAT poem?

    Hmmm, i guess people have ignored this WOW WOW poem..it's great, i enjoyed every word i read...

    Down into the depths of forever I fall.
    No scream accompanies my descent,
    Just a sigh of tranquil dizziness.
    My hands find your beauteous face,
    Trembling with wonder they absorb the reality of you.
    Caught in awe of this sensuous fusion, delicate fingers urge on.

    the words above are pretty, fresh and brilliant,
    wow, ..i think you should change the background colour because..sometimes the background colour affect readers and ..their eyes go blurry..like mine now but ..NOT A BIG ISSUE..this poem is SWELL, it's good....keep writing...

    "my hands find your beauteous face"
    --------- wow, i like that----


    “What dream is this, in which I find?
    Your touch, once trapped within my mind”

    i like the question..terrific..."what dream....and..
    once trapped in my mind...mmmm, nice!!!

    keep writing!!!


  • Sweetangelgrace gold member
    April 3, 2007

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    I really like this poem it was very different and i love poetry that talks about how deep someone's love is for another....


    grace

  • Kari gold member
    March 31, 2007

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    Aw, this is so filled and impacted with emotion. I love it. The best of luck to you in the contest.

  • Blueskywonder
    March 31, 2007

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    This is soooo beautiful Apple... a truly sensaul piece of poetry expressed with heartfelt passion. A truly beautiful piece. Well done... thankyou for sharing such lovely thoughts with us.

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