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Don't Run Away




Dear ... dear ... dear ... hell, anyone;


Sitting alone as all fades to black,
Emotions have left and its what I lack,
Planning to escape, to run far away,
Right now, this moment, without a delay.

I'm tired of hanging to nothing at all,
I'm tired of seeing these teardrops fall,
All this drama has broken me down,
While light fades away, and silence surrounds.

Emptiness clouds my reality,
Never letting anyone see;
The art of slowly falling apart,
Not even whole from the start.

Slowly turning numb to everyone I know,
All of these feelings, I now will let go,
Forlorn and shattered, I'm losing my mind,
Determined to vanish, and leave all behind.

Eagerly holding the gun in my hand,
I hope that someone will understand,
All that will remain is a memory,
Of a girl trapped in this misery.

Softly, some whispers are formed in my head,
They calm me to make me realize instead,
That I cannot break, I have to stand strong,
The struggle to live is where I belong.

Hang on, hope and light will come,
Only after the dark days are done,
Fight back and never decide to quit,
Happiness comes when you need it.

So much will happen, you just have to wait,
Please look up high, don't drown in this hate,
So move on my angel, and don't you forget,
Live life as it is, without a regret.

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  • sOuL
    September 27, 2008
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    i am afraid you have already won so many trophies, if i dont give you another then you will start beating me
    but the problem is i have a doubt that you have read the poem you are about to read to join the contest
    because you have entered with a poem that i dont feel like what i wanna feel


    • Never Fall in Love
      September 28, 2008
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      If you;re going to base the poem on the amount of trophies, then I'm removing my entry. I read your poem and I thought it fit - so don't accuse anyone of not reading - if anything, you probably havent taken the time to read this.


  • written-in-ink
    September 19, 2008

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    very very nice message

    i mean i feel it and i have been there before
    but i think that you did a nice job capturing it and then making it to where you gve advice and help soemone


    thank you so much and good luck


  • Corinthians13-4
    August 22, 2008

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    That was extremely thought-provoking. After I read it, I just sat there, thinking. How it reminded me of myself... drowning in sorrow, wallowing in self-pity. More or less giving up on any hope of happiness I was clinging on to. And then I told myself that it wasn't worth it. That he wasn't worth the pain. That I had to be stronger. That crying - that being weak - wasn't an option anymore.
    This poem was very reassuring, and I thank you for letting me read it.

    <3 Erin


  • RainbowSky
    July 29, 2008
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    oooppps I forgot your claps

  • RainbowSky
    July 29, 2008

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    "I'm tired of seeing these teardrops fall,
    All this drama has broken me down"
    That was my favorite line, and this is a great write thank you for submitting it and letting me read it. Best of luck in everything you enter this piece in.


  • xoalwaysthinkingxo
    July 17, 2008

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    when i started reading this poem i was wondering why it was in my contest because i asked for something to cheer me up, and in the begining it doesn't. but as i read down tmore especially the last two parts. This is great.
    I wish you the best of luck in this contest


  • Til the Day I Die
    May 22, 2008

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    wow images come poppin in when i read this...your awsome...lol dude your so cool.....lol It's Dawn btw, I changed my name again...sorry lol


  • JustxThexBeginning
    April 18, 2008

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    i love it... the second to last stanza really related to me... exactly how i'm feeling... the imagery that came from this poem was just amazing... thank you for entering and i wish you the best of luck in my contest...


  • Swan song gold member
    April 12, 2008
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    You two were made for each other. A lovely creation for sure well done. !!!!

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 11, 2008
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    It's like your reassuring yourself everything will be ok. Great work and very catchy beginning.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 2, 2008

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    Very well done and very fitting to the thoughts of my daughter in law. Thank you for this awesome inspirational poem. I and congrats on all of the previously won trophies I wish you the best of luck


  • psychiatrists dream
    November 28, 2007

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    such an uplifting piece of writing, and so beautifully written between two very talented writers, thanks for entering and good luck!!


  • autarky
    October 21, 2007

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    Ah, I edited the contest to give more insight into the story, but this is almost exactly what our friend went through; your intuition is incredible. The poem itself was stunning, encouraging, and so uplifting. I appreciate this so, so much!


  • No.Longer.Bleeding
    October 9, 2007

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    So much will happen, you just have to wait,
    Please look up high, don't drown in this hate,

    wow, those are powerful lines. awesome job! definitely uplifting through times of struggles

    Monica <3


  • celestial
    September 15, 2007
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    Nice

    This was very nice, and has good meaning. Thanks for sharing.


  • Sara Bellem
    September 10, 2007

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    Sadly Beautiful. This sounds like my friend, she explains and expresses her pain this way and this poem reminds me of her, oh so sad but yet truly beautiful... Thank you for entering, it means a lot to me. God Bless you


  • PhoenixFaith
    August 12, 2007

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    Hoodwinked

    What a wonderful piece. I love the rhyme scheme it fits so nicely with the whole flow and the rest of the poem. You did I great job with this keep it up.

    Never give up
    Kate


  • knitonepearlone
    August 7, 2007

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    A lovely write and one which would appeal to young people. I was puzzled as I read the early stanzas but all became clear towards the end. Beautifully crafted. Thanks for entering my contest.


  • Dlvvanzor
    August 4, 2007

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    That was lovely. Absolutely lovely, and very true. Thanks for entering this into my contest.

    ^_^
    -Dlvvanzor


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 15, 2007

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    Another write of yorus I can more than relate to. Oh and I believe you are the Red. If I am wrong, then... Well, I'm wrong . Just going by your style of writing in the past and this seems to flow along well with it. Well done to yourself and miraculous! Wonderful collab, they are very hard to do. Just as Whitemaiden... We collabed for a contest. Well done.


  • Desiree-Valdez
    May 21, 2007
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    what member of my ap family would ya like to be?

    • Never Fall in Love
      May 21, 2007
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      erm ... I thought only winners get to be family members .. guess i was wrong
      erm .. whatever you want .. I dont mind
      I just ... don't want a daught or mother
      and I've got too many sisters
      so aunt .. neice .. cousins
      you choose


  • adios muchachos gold member
    May 21, 2007

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    Dear Never Fall In Love

    Read this from out of the contest, and am not surprised at the comments before me. This is just super!

    And if there is anything I like more than skilled poetry writing, it is a poem/story with a moral.

    Nice going! And good luck as well!

    John-Las Vegas, Nevada

  • Desiree-Valdez
    May 19, 2007

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    This is very beautiful poem and yeas although it started out a little depressing it lifted a lot, I loved it good entry!!!!


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 23, 2007

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    i would like to thank you for your entry into this contest for ashley. she will be reading all of the poems and i know she will appreciate this. good luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie

  • OurxBeginning
    April 9, 2007

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    Woohooooo!!! Go us, sis, we rock. Congrats on your trophy, sis! Hope you get sooo much more.


  • DareU2Byourself
    April 9, 2007

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    It's actually a little of both options, and I like that. This is an incredible piece, I really do love it. I might suggest that instead of "hanging to nothing at all" you say "clinging to nothing at all." But either way, it's a very good piece. I love the inspiration and encouragement coming in at the end. Gosh, there are so many lines I absolutely fall in love with. I can't say enough good things about this. Thanks for the entering in my contest. Take care you two.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 8, 2007

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    I would know your writing if it was one in a million.
    I must say that your friend really has some great talent going on here also.
    Both of you are truly amazing.
    You hqave done an outstanding job.
    I'm amaze at how you do this kind of writing.
    Your talent has no end.
    You are my remarkable Sweet Heart.
    Granny

    So proud of you Missy ~~~


  • Haunting Whispers
    April 7, 2007

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    Once again, your words astound me. Absolutely brilliant, and powerfully unique. I loved it.


  • ProjectBLACKROSE
    April 4, 2007
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    wow

    great poetry, the rhymes are nice and well organized, this is one of the best poems I've ever seen!


  • Amera gold member
    April 3, 2007

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    This is a lovely and inspiring quatrain and it flows so smoothly with the aabb rhyme scheme. Well composed and thought provoking. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    This is beautiful. Your words flow so well with this other persons. Keep up the good work.


  • Ur Supergurl silver member
    April 1, 2007

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    awesome

    this is great...i really like this. i can relate really well to it. beautifully written and well done, babe. i hope that you find happiness...sounds like you deserve it. take care. -Sable-


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    April 1, 2007

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    This was truly beautiful. Not really knowing the work of either one of you..(sorry) I really cant say who wrote what lines. But I do know that is was done with a very easy flow that just blended..
    Great job
    Soulful Woman


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    April 1, 2007

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    I will guess yours are the red. I am just guessing here. I really liked this poem because of the many layers. I am happy it ended well.


  • Rakerman1
    April 1, 2007

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    I agree that this flowed seamlessly from verse to verse...and that's no small task. I loved the way you both gave a feeling of strength even though your pain is quite clear.
    Exceptional writing my friends
    Very well done
    Raker


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    April 1, 2007

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    This is a great collabaration between two people who must know each others styles very well, it flowed beautifully and has a message a lot of people have felt before encapsulated in the words... well done to you both

    Karen


  • PoetryDove
    April 1, 2007

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    I have always liked collaborations, and especially loved this one. I like the emotion it shows and it really has truth to it. Hope you do well in the contest to the both of you. Great job!!


  • Adabard
    April 1, 2007

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    A very good co-write. I already know that you wrote the red lines. Good job, maybe we should co-write sometime.


  • trista gold member
    April 1, 2007

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    This is a wonderful collaboration poem! The stanzas definitely have slightly different "voices" but go together really well. It reminds me of those little voices we all have inside our heads, one that tells us how terrible things are and to just give up, and the other who keeps encouraging us. I especially loved the last lines of the poem...it's difficult to live life without regrets, but it doesn't do us any good to have them, either. (Well, short of hopefully learning a lesson. )

    I really feel, while reading this, the two of you tapped into each other's emotions. That is wonderful! Quite possibly it's because you've both felt these feelings so were able to relate to each other very well...which for a collab poem such as this, I think is essential. Great job!

    Since I've already guessed which of you wrote each part, I won't put it here and ruin it for everyone else.

    Again, great job, both of you! Good luck in the competition also.

    Much love,
    ~J.

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