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Relics of Paradise

Ocean shimmers under sun-kissed skies,
crystal waters stroke on silken shores.
We inhale alluring mists of salty seas,
cleanse soreness from our souls.

We stroll barefoot, hand in hand,
squeeze cool, wet sand between our toes.
Genteel waves lap our feet,
shivering bliss.

Driftwood litters beaches,
beckons rest.
We sort stones and shells
polished by tide’s constancy;
relics of paradise.


Joyce Josephson


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  • Shantti
    May 2

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    This is sweet (had me smiling throughout). Excellent imagery

    Ocean shimmers under sun kissed skies,
    crystal waters stroke silken shore.
    We inhale alluring mist of salty sea,
    cleansing soreness from our souls.

    The ocean seems to have that effect dosen't it.

    Very beautiful. Thank you


  • Sunkissed xo
    November 11, 2008

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    What an exquisite poem! the imagery within this is absolutely stunning, I almost feel as if I am right there with you! this is a truly divine write, well done! best of luck in the contest, thanks for entering!

    peace ♥


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    Bandit appreciation!

    Thank you Freed, for contributing this fine poem to The Poetic Bandits reading list, and congratulations on the Gold and HM, so well deserved

    ~Lilac


  • Lady Altheia
    June 13, 2008

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    Such beautiful imagery you expressed. I see this poem has been entered in many contests. Congrats on your bronze and honorable mentions.


  • Elle Kaye
    June 13, 2008

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    Also congrats on the trophies ^^ wonderful write, stunning configuration and beautiful imagrey. Fantastic job, thanks for sharing.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    June 11, 2008

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    Congratulations on the trophies I really like the imagery in this piece, it is soft and gentle and draws the reader into your words wonderfully well beautiful wording makes this poem a joy to read!

    Keep writing

    Polly

  • Shadow Darkstar
    June 10, 2008

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    Congrats on the Honourable and the bronze.

    Whilst reading this I felt like I was at the beach. Thanks so much for the read, truly amazing and inspiring. I'd give more clappy's but I'm out of points.


  • The Hermit
    June 10, 2008
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    Very good I 'm glad I returned to reading poetry. Amazing


  • warrior-eagle
    June 10, 2008

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    I really like this. I am glad I read this,
    this was very good.
    good work.



  • grannyeri gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Very peaceful and restful the images you portray in these lines; easy to read and understand what is being said here.


  • Twinstar
    June 9, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem you have penned here, I long to be walking on the beach. This poem has beautiful imagery, almost feel as though I am already there.

    Congrats on the bronze and HM, well deserved!

    Love & Light
    Debbera


  • wolfcub
    September 11, 2007

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    This is soo pretty. I know its about nature but its really unlike most nature poems (even about the sea and beaches). Very pretty and beautifully written!
    Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
    Katie

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    Thank you for this very beautiful reminder of the wonder of nature in this world.. beautiful

    Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the very best of luck

    Karen


  • second-born
    August 16, 2007

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    This is such a very soulful poem about nature...oh how I wish I could experience this "relics of paradise" perfectly painted in your fantastic poem...


  • Summer Dawn
    July 27, 2007

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    very loving and peaceful moments of romance to remember, very finely etched into words. well done.


  • Taxing Minds
    July 27, 2007
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    What an interesting nirvana. Good job


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    July 21, 2007

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    "we inhale the alluring mist of salty sea"

    Such a powerful and incredibly sensual image right there, and thats in the first stanza, it really builds the piece up for what it is.

    sorry for the late judgement, and thanks for the entry in the contest


  • N.W. Clerk
    July 7, 2007

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    Wonderful imagery and word choice, with a pleasant flow throughout the poem. Thank you for entering!


  • I-Am-Custard
    June 12, 2007

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    There's lovely sibillance in the first stanza, I like it... well, you alliterated well throughout, I'm a fan of it so that's very impressive.
    I can't really offer advice on this, it's nice as it is. Thank you for entering.


  • Red Rose of Light
    June 2, 2007
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    very good best of luck in the contest


  • iamlost gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    Rushing of waves. . .

    I could smell the sea, feel the sand being squeezed between my toes as I walked beside the sea. Wonderful imagery in this piece, you created a beautiful image of the nature in the sea, and the beauty of the earth/heaven. This had every sense imbued in it, your description was simple yet very entrancing . . . great write, thank you for entering and sharing this with me.


  • bananasfoster42
    April 6, 2007
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    beautiful write. thanks for entering!


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 31, 2007

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    A beautiful poem with such calm and wonderful thoughts. Great rhythm, flow and rhyme! All the best in this contest
    Gaylene


  • CherylAnn
    March 30, 2007

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    Beautiful Write

    What a beautiful picture you have painted for all to see with these wonderful choice of words.Very awesome imagery with just the right beat.Great write,a blessing to have read
    Blessings
    ~Cheryl~


  • Twins 4 me
    March 30, 2007
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    Very nice! Great flow and rhythm! Good luck in the contest!


  • Elvenfairy
    March 30, 2007

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    sounds heavenly indeed. I could picture this very clearly in my mind. Thanks for entering my conetst just one thing, go back and read my rules, make sure you are actually following both of them ok?

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