What may I do,
to pleasingly satisfy you
Whom shall I be,
which persona hides your key
Lost to reality,
loss of sensibility
Crazy Insane,
certainly not mundane
Give into which voice,
is there ever really a choice
What shall I say,
never enough of a point to convey
Senseless word play,
never enough of a point to relay
To whom shall I give the score,
to whom shall this victory pour
Have I saved what is left of you,
while destroying it too
No mystery grander than this,
in this, I find limitless bliss
For why I know not,
an answer I've rarely sought
Now I believe that I've been caught,
this is not what I thought
Senseless word play,
and now I must pay
Is this price too high,
should I let this pass by
Or will this shatter me,
searing reality
Show me what I refuse to see,
making me hear some silent plea
Who are you to do this to me,
making me see what I don't want to see
Flown away, never to return,
painstakingly letting my soul burn
Intoxicating self-inflicted pain,
crazy insane
The Heavens should not have created me,
master who holds to key
Unwanted hidden glory,
weaver of emotion and story
Sadistic master,
but I can no longer last here
Shall I see what you need me to see,
be what you wish me to be
Give up my mastery,
but then who would I be
I know no other way,
now that I can't make this stay
Some overwhelming sense,
feeling so intense
Frighten me,
completely, heinously
So, here I am,
sacrificial lamb
Cannot step forward, nor back,
finally, an answer for which I lack
Lost in unknown,
totally blown
Who are you to do this to me,
for now I truly see
What Myself has kept hidden from Me,
now hear my twisted plea
This time there is no game,
I cannot keep doing the same
Crazy Insane,
never simple, never plain
I want luxurious purity now,
and all that you allow
A master brought down.
A contest entry
- Anything. Just Impress Me. by I-Am-Custard.
900 points, ended April 13, 2007, 58 entries
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Comments
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'Senseless word play' about sums this up... you lost your meaning a bit in your endeavour to make it rhyme, and though it JUST ABOUT made sense I had to work too hard to decipher it. You could also do with breaking it into stanzas as it's a bit inaccesable in the form it's in. I liked 'luxurous purity', but it doesn't fit with the rest very well, it's too... poetic compared to the colloquial tone you had elsewhere.
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