I’ve perceived to find the inner crypt-
Succeeding with a minds eye loyalty,
Exactly how this tomb becomes my own
Dispenses with the way in which I die.
It sequels to suspense as yet not how,
Who understand my words show this demise
As afterwards prepares the aftermath,
In victory, who’d illustrate attention?
Let he who is excessive take the stand-
Leave gentle words in freefall elegy
To solemnize initially, one man,
With canticle, abiding brief description
How memory can prick the said retort.
An all too proud, but ceasing self exultant,
Who terminates this lifetime for another.
Disguises death, eliminates all anguish
Achieved as such as sad, but pain I knew,
Intrigues the light to beautify revival.
Unerringly does superficial sense
Trouble-free, environmental friendly
Become the day we all emerge as one.
A contest entry
- Free Verse...But by masterblaster.
390 points, ended April 15, 2007, 28 entries
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my first way is to read backwards....
my father taught me to read from top to bottom..
or front to back...
I started out reading before I went to school...
and I read the STOP sign as POTS...
and dad was so patience with me....
until I understood it was not excepted that way...
but the other way...
strange; I am...
thank you for the read again! -
Hi, very nice write, fits the pic well, interesting story line,all the best in the comp, so many see so many different things in that pic it is mind boggling,lol,hugs Di
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Indeed this poem is designed to be read backwards.
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You never disappoint your readers Tony, as always you pen brilliantly, I am in total awe of your talent as a writer, Bella
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hmm
a serious freewrite. i tried to read it backwards and it had the same stoic effect. it seems more sad than other pieces you've written, but that shows me that you're a versatile writer. i liked the diction- caticle. -
Whoa, this is deep. It's like... the only way I can think to describe it is a river, deep and ever flowing. Great job and good luck in the contest.
shi
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