Mother as the God and God placed in a pod,
Dad so agile against the evil with spite,
lot of things in the mind, both kind and unkind,
rewind the days of the past that spread so vast.
The Running nose and the torn trousers,
the strapped chinos and the pale dark shirts,
and the roadside cotton candy munched
and drenched in the watery mouth!
The street plays that lit the darkness of the night
and plays in the ground in the red hot pot!
All these are wane and gone in the midst
of the muddily clouted and mystified mind.
Whither do I go in search of this life?
Hither do I drench in tears in strife!
Provoked by the chase of this forfeited freedom,
I am but a weeping child, crying in the wild.
Hate not, want not, waste not and haste not,
the life not sheen for those who are mean.
The goodness in the hide and greatness so wide
Let us march backwards with a prided stride!
A contest entry
- Revisit Your Past... by Miss Faerie.
525 points, ended April 4, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm sorry to say, your poem has been eliminated from the contest.
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Again you have painted a vivid picture with your words, you clearly show that your words are not forced, you have a nice flow, thank you for sharing this with us.
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your words elegant, beautiful. A journey, full of life's ups and down. Isn't it amazing how a journey such as yous can be written, so as to remind others, that this is life...powerful a medley of many things, and how your talent gives us the honor to know you.
Love it!
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Great write. Very moving and personal. It makes me think of Shakespear a little bit with the words you used. Great write. Very well written.
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great work................ i wish now as if i cud have a rewind button in my life.........keep up ur good work Sir!
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Bravo!
A wonderful vivid portrayal of bygone days of your youth,full of descriptive imagery that should be told for us over in this part of the western world,and elsewhere. Your life,your feelings,your fathers' feelings,the frustrations of life,your future...all portrayed here,,,Thank you for portraying so realistically,everything that you experience and I wish you every every success in your writing and in this contest...A very moving very complete portrayal of life where you live..Bravo!
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nice!
I like this poem a lot. it has great imagery and your word choice was excellent. thanks for sharing. keep writing.
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great poem here love you ahve certainly opened the draw of imagination with this one...you ahve expressed your words perfectly well done and good luck in the contest xx
laura xxxx
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