What is love if not lip service?
How many times can you say you really meant it?
What is love if not completely?
Lip service love proclaimed so weakly
Tell me you love me
I'll tell you too
But honest with each other
We couldn't give a hoot
I don't think I've ever really fallen
Maybe I'm all gone wrong
I've paid too much lip service love
Just walking my mouth along
Pray for me child, just for a while
That I might break out
Pray for me child
Even a smile would do for now
(Damien Rice-Grey Room)
How many people can you truly say you love? Love is an over used word. Everyone should love their family. But how many people do you find yourself telling you love outside your family?? How many times do you really mean it?? How many times are you just telling someone you love them because you've decided they're an ok person?? How many times have you truly fallen?
Author notes
Grumble grunt...Doesnt flow well. Not good. Not happy. Grumble grunt
Please tell me what you think
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very nice poem. i can see the feeling in it and it is very deep. good job!!
Ella -
I'm at a loss for words cuz I don't know what to say to that. But...you sound like one of those 70's peace-loving artists. It's cute though...but u never loved me?
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Why grumble grunt?
It reminds me of Robert Indiana... in some odd way. Pop artists and poetry sounds an odd combination, but that's a compliment, by the way!
You make a very good point, and I love the phrase "lip service love", this whole piece is oh-so-true, so get happier with it!
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hmmm...
i liked this quite a bit. it's very very very true.
these are my favorite lines i think:
I don't think I've ever really fallen
Maybe I'm all gone wrong
I've paid too much lip service love
Just walking my mouth along
great write!
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good observation
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It is a nice piece...
You have taken on an interesting theme..and there are some good things happening here..Maybe you should go back and re-work the parts with which you are not comfortable...Good effort. All the best, Mat -
but you are so very right!!!! You make some very valed points in this one! and you know, I wonder how many people with see your points in this and say to themselves, hey that sounds like me. and try to find a way to correct that. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Keep writing i will be here reading!!!
Loves ya,
Auntie
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