In part the first, we shall examine -
The how and why she got there.
To make it quick, we shall relate
in the form of light-speed nightmare.
Then in chapter two, it shall be told
of what was then began there.
The things she saw, of what she learned
and how it forever scarred her.
Then come the intermission,
you shall see a tiny glimpse
of what it is like when she stops dreaming
and looks out into the world.
In the third episode, we reach the climax
And that's where the show begins.
Then in the final act, yes, the curtain call,
Well... That you shall see then.
So come along and join me now,
and turn these brown and dirty pages,
the show begins, the drapery rises
upon a dusty and cracked mirror.
I.
The looking glass shatters.
A girl lies on the stage, contorted.
Her eyes twitch, her face is twisted.
A syringe drops from her fingers,
it falls away
further
further
further
D R O P
Drop.
And falls down the hole.
The girl's eyes snap open at th sound.
She drags herself, stumbles, and falls down.
She grabs as she falls, to get the syringe
but her fingers are numb.
She cannot grasp.
Then flashes of light and thunderous roars!
Orgasmic chills and screams of joy!
Her dream begins, the stage disappears.
She hits the bottom of the pit,
has long forgotten the syringe.
She rests joyfully within a grave trench.
Fresh bodies have been added,
and she who lives takes erotic pleasure in their lack.
She bathes in their flesh and blood,
washing herself of all pleasantries.
A soft whining interrupts her soak,
her eyes dart around the pit.
A young lady lies covered in blood,
her own and that of others.
The girl with which we began crawl over
and talks to the other one
She says,
"What beautiful clothes,"
as she touches the silky fabric of the dress,
and as she tries to slip it off,
"Are you as lovely underneath?"
The young lady protests!
Her face flushes red.
The first puts a finger to the other's lips and speaks-
"No need to be embarassed."
nodding to the pile of corpses.
"It's not like they can see you."
She takes the clothes, gently stroking the fabric still,
then tangles her fingers in the other's hair.
She speaks again -
"What is your name my beautiful?"
The girl chokes out the single word.
"Alice..."
Alas, what's in a name?
Is it a heart, a soul?
Nay.
The former kisses the stained red lips of the other,
O, so soft and sweet -
"Now I am Alice..."
She pulls slowly and seductively away.
"And you are naught."
The newly dubbed Alice dons the garments of the Alice-that-was,
The one that was can't help but stare at the beauty of the second.
The lifeless can never help but stare.
Alice looks around the pit of filth,
A movement catches her eye,
Then she saw a white rabbit sitting there,
carrying her syringe.
At contact of sight, the creature darted and Alice sighed,
"You'll be late Mr. Rabbit. You mustn't be late."
She cackled with delight and took chase,
walking through the door leading from the hole.
Blackout. The first part ends.
II.
Alice walks up the stairs into the sunlit forest
No, not a forest, a garden
Roses are a red as can be,
but wait!
They drip red to reveal a gentle white underneath.
Who would paint such pristine flowers red?
Paint, such fake stuff, with no real substance of its own
The painter would be near-by,
or else the lacquer would have dried.
She looks around the bend of the bush
and her eyes widen at what she sees.
An army of workers with brushes in hand
were painting the roses red,
but not with any latex mix
but the blood of a hundred thousand men.
They drag the broken bodies around,
dipping their implements into their wounds,
they had to keep painting eternally
for if they stopped, the reds would turn to browns.
Alice runs down an empty path to avoid a gruesome fate,
when she comes across the servants' court,
where the slaves of some lady wait.
The lady is quite far away,
So Alice asks the nearest man-
"Who is the lady for which you wait?"
He replies in tones of ire, and with a tounge of hate -
"They call the bitch the queen of hearts,
but you wouldn't catch me dead in the bed of that tart.
She sleeps with twenty men a night, and when they fail to please
She lets out a roar and tells her men to seize
these infiltrators of her bed
She cries 'Off with their bloody heads!"
He coughs slightly,
"If ye catch me drift."
Everyone stops!
The queen doth approach!
She spies Alice hiding behind the men,
She smiles with delight
"Well, what have we here?
Come closer, dear!
You look good enough to eat."
Alice approaches cautiously,
what could any lady want with her?
"I really do not wish to intrude,
I followed a rabbit and got much too lost..."
Thoughts of her precious needle float through her head,
the ecstasy she needs so bad.
The bastard rabbit will pay with his life,
she will have her darling back.
"A rabbit you say?"
The queen said with mock surprise,
"Well, let us see what we can do for you.
He cannot have gone too far."
Blind trust is a dangerous thing you see,
but Alice cares nothing of danger,
she lives for the rush, the touch and the love,
the fuck and the drug and the drink.
"Thank you, my lady."
She follows the queen to a room draped in velvet red,
where suddenly she is thrust to the bed.
"Oh, yes... I will help
but first you will pay
even a queen has her price."
Fabric tears from sillouhettes, seen beyond the curtains
first with passion from Alice by the queen,
then in ecstacy comes vice versa.
Flesh tangles and turns and they claw and they scratch
They attack eachother's flesh.
They bit hard and love harder,
they find passion they'd never dreamed.
The queen holds fast!
She'll have the last laugh!
"Your ass is mine, my darling slut."
But with a sudden, passionate kiss
she surrenders her will
and Alice takes the top.
She pulls away and whispers soft,
"Who is whose, my dearest bitch?"
The night fell hard, they lay in each others' arms.
They whispered of lust and sex.
But Alice did not forget
that damned rabbit,
who had taken her love and her joy.
As morning approached the queen gave everything up,
telling all that she knew of the furry demon-spawn.
"He works for a beast,
a creature far worse
than anything your nightmares could possibly conjure up."
Alice now knows of what she must do,
if she ever wants to see her precious again.
The queen says -
"Love, I will wait, we must do this again
you're far better than any dull man."
Then Alice marches off...
To fight the Jabberwock.
The curtain falls for intermission.
Intermission: The stage is bare but the audience sees every fucking thing. They're entrapped and in love with every moment. Out back, in the alley, the girl lies. Breathing oh so fucking hard. Her use on stage has long since ended, but they won't kill her. Her dream isn't over, and she might be of use in other performances. Maybe an extra or a back-up dancer. The two stage-hands use her and abandon her to the dreams and nightmares that will come.
III.
In the early dawn before she had left
Alice had said,
"If I can tame you
and turn a queen to a pet,
what can a beast do to me?
No bastard rabbit
No raging dragon
Could ever hope to be my better."
The queen heard the words and fell to love on Alice once again
but Alice simply stroked her hair and kissed her breast
and left with sword in hand.
Now Alice enters the forest in the dress that she wore,
before the queen had taken it off.
Torn in all the right places to give men a show
but still clinging tightly to her form.
The sword is strapped around her waist,
her hair is frayed still from being pulled and stroked.
A fitting way to enter battle, to kill and maim the Jabberwock.
She smiles with malice and goes to the cave where the monster would appear.
She hates and waits and grips her sword
and so the hours pass.
Night falls again upon the dreamworld.
From out of the cave the rabbit runs, syringe in mouth
Alice cries -
"My dear, my love!"
But before she can give chase
the villain arrives, the showdown begins.
The beast is without mercy as he assaults the poor little girl
He laughs and he beats upon Alice's body
Her sword does her no good.
She starts to submit...
But NO!
She will not just lay down!
She will fight to the end with what tools she has!
She sits in the dust, waits for the right moment
The beast approaches, lowers its head to her breast.
It intends to eat her heart and lungs first.
But she gently places her arms around its neck.
She kisses softly the top of its head.
"There's no need to harm me,
I don't come for you.
But the rabbit is mine,
You don't mind do you?"
The monster purrs and nuzzles her chest.
She smiles as her new pet draws away from her breast.
The rabbit is cornered.
It is almost time.
It dashes away to the end of the line.
"You'll be mine yet, my precious one."
Then she said to the beast,
"Jabberwock! Come."
The monster followed her, and she followed the rabbit
There was nowhere to run.
The time was now.
Blackout. Scene III gives way.
The Final Act begins.
IV:
Alice approaches the rabbit with care.
The Jabberwock glares at the creature who had once been his servant
but now challenged his mistress.
Alice launches at the rabbit with the now blunt sword,
she rips through the hide and breaks through the bones.
The rabbit is dead, the syringe is hers again.
She lifts her head and says -
"Jabberwock, dear, bring me to the queen."
The devil picks her up and carries her back
to the velvet-draped room from which she had came.
The queen had waited eagerly, and is joyed at Alice's approach
She runs to her lover and embraces her with fervor.
They kiss and they touch and then glance back at the beast.
They smile and strip and lay down with the creature,
stroking his fur and kissing his neck.
After a long night and day of pleasure have passed
with the creature and queen asleep,
no energy left.
Alice goes to a table and finds her syringe
undamaged, it seems, she sighs with relief.
She carries it back and lays back down against the beast.
She rips open her bodice, exposing her breasts.
The animal and the queen both awake at her scent.
Alice says,
"Dears, this I must do
if I wish to stay here with you.
Else in moments I must return to the stage.
I cannot bear to go back
to the hell I go through.
So here I shall seal myself away."
She plunges the syringe into her beautiful breast.
Flash.
The girl stabbed the needle into her veins. "Fuck you, bastards. I am my own."
Flash
She sighs gently and kisses the queen and strokes the beast.
Flash
The girl writhed in pain. She'd never been through this before. But she knew if she could just bear it, she would be happy forever.
Flash
Ecstasy pours through Alice's body.
Such she has never felt before,
she shares all of it with the beast and the queen
kissing and stroking and biting and eating
they all reach their limits.
They found ultimate lust in a threesome that nature forbade.
Flash
The girl felt at last an ecstatic pain. Her last moments hurt more than anything. But it was worth it to return to that world and stay. To never again pass back through the looking glass.
The pieces of the mirror are swept off the stage.
The curtain falls forever.
Author notes
**THE EROTICA LABEL IS MERELY A COURTESY.**
While I don't think it needs to be labeled such, there is some sexual content and I choose to disclose this.
A semi-epic poem in four real parts, with a prologue and an intermission. Parts of it do rhyme, but it's mostly unintentional. The only parts I made to rhyme were certain pieces of dialogue, mostly from minor characters. I strongly caution readers, this is adult material, and it should be treated as such.
I didn't realize til I was half done that this was so close to the contest title. XD Oh well. What can ya do?
Oh and please don't be discouraged by the length.
I think you'll find the time you spent worth it.
I can't believe I wrote this whole thing in the course of a day.
Hope you enjoy.
A contest entry
- A Drug Induced Wonderland by Exodus.
600 points, ended April 7, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This twisted enough for you?
Comments
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Wow this was really good! Very long but you kept my attention throughout the entire piece! Great job my favorite part was:it falls away
further
further
further
D R O P
Drop."
So good. I can see how you won a silver trophy with this! Keep on penning!
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This is amazing. I love it . The way the scene played out was excellent.
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This is amazing. I love it . The way the scene played out was excellent.
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This is so freaken cool!!!!
A girl lies on the stage, contorted.
Her eyes twitch, her face is twisted.
A syringe drops from her fingers,
it falls away
further
further
further
D R O P
Drop.
REally!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This was a good read. Very long but very good. You painted a very vivid picture with your words. This was a great story. I am glad I found this poem. Well good and keep up the good writing.
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This is twisted, different, interesting and a lot more adjectives that I just can't think of at the moment.
Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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Wow, it must take great talent to come up with something like this. Everything about your poem is perrfect, amd even though it is considerably lengthy, I felt that it ended too soon. I specifically liked these lines: "The lifeless can never help but stare." "they had to keep painting eternally/for if they stopped, the reds would turn to browns." "Her use on stage has long since ended, but they won't kill her. Her dream isn't over, and she might be of use in other performances. Maybe an extra or a back-up dancer. The two stage-hands use her and abandon her to the dreams and nightmares that will come." This should be the ultimate twist to a fairy tale and the ultimate description of drug-induced dreams (or nightmares) and drug addiction. The way you placed the original Alice in the story is genious. The title is a real attention-grabber as well. After seeing it, I just had to read your poem.


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Twisted. Beautiful. Shocking. Stunning.
I'm not usually one for epic poems, but the almost story-like form that you gave this piece caught my attention right to the end, keeping me reading and appreciating this fine write! I love how twisted and obscure you've made this, breaking the fairytale mould with something dark and dangerous, something sexier!
"They drag the broken bodies around,
dipping their implements into their wounds,
they had to keep painting eternally
for if they stopped, the reds would turn to browns."
I especially liked that little stanza. Once again, brilliant write. Well done!


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Brilliant write. I enjoyed it a lot. Keep them coming.
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that was amazing ! i usually cant stand long poems but that one gives innocent alice a dirty twists
a modern day version if you will. i love it !!

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amazing write! The imagery is well done and beautiful! and a good twist in it as well.. nice job with the trophy! you deserved it!! great write! again, bravo


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wow..that was very well done..i love it so much..your imagery is so real. it is pretty amazing. this is the best i have read in a while. it was long but i couldnt stop reading. i couldnt tear my eyes away from it. i love the twist in it.. and i like how you really used your imagination.


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Well deserved trophy... although I must say... I have read twisted fairy tales and this reminded me alot of that, of course you were following the contest rules so that makes sense... however I did appreciate the storyline of the drug wrought Alice and her perverted pleasures... this was very effectively written out, and the length and langauge was perfect. Very good write.
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I'm only making a suggestion here...could you lengthen this a few million more words or so? Just asking? It just feels like there was more you needed to say. I'll look for the add on...
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this is not what i was expecting.....but nice none the less.....i have to come back and read more later as it wasa bit too long for me...what i did look at, i liked....creepy.....imaginative.....not really my style...but that is why i find it appealing!
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Hmmm
Twisted... yes... I want to read it again but I'll bookmark it so I don't cost you points. It is lost on me and the pink font distracts. What I did glean I kinda liked, it reminded me of a deftones music video.
The length did drag on, but I honestly will be back to read it again.
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"Ecstasy pours through Alice's body.
Such she has never felt before,
she shares all of it with the beast and the queen
kissing and stroking and biting and eating
they all reach their limits.
They found ultimate lust in a threesome that nature forbade."
As much as I detest story like poems, and the length of such poems, I really enjoyed this. I loved the way you you took this girl through the story.. until the curtain fell forever...
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Well done! This is expertly executed. I wish I could write something as good as this. Great Job!


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Wow. This was interesting to say the least. I am not one for epic poems but I must say you wrote it exceedingly well. I found myself caught up in the story, unlike most poems where you can stay a measure away from the story this sucked you in, not unlike a falling down a rabbit hole hmm? I was unsure about the bluntness of the mentions of the syringe. I would have thought you would use metaphors to refer to them. I am not sure if I love it or loathe it lol. Either way this was fantastically capturing
Thank you for entering, best of luck and sorry I'm taking so long to judge.
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Body is required for applause. <3


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great
wow this is really interesting! it is long but it kept my attention the whole time!
















