They always say
dont run before you walk
they always say
dont scream before you talk
but whats the problem
whats the big deal
you dont have to touch
before you can feel
you dont have to hate
before you can love
because some people find
it just fits like a glove
A contest entry
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600 points, ended April 8, 2007, 33 entries
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I would suggest a greater use of grammar, just to make it seem like a teenager didn't whip it up for English class. Other than that, a good read.
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Short and to the point. Thanks for the entry in the contest and goodluck
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Beautiful
I liked this poem it's meaning is very true to how I feel but you did not follow my one rule but I wil give you the chance to correct it thank you. -Damien
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beautiful write...i luv it
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Great poem! Good luck in the contest!
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Nice rhyme and flow. Thanks for the great entry.
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I like that fits like a glove very nice indeed.
Nicely formed poem with good flow.
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nice poem good luck in the contest ^^
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Thank you for your contest submission, I do need to ask you review the rules and edit your submission appropriately. Please IM me and let me know this has been done, thank you.
A nice simple little write full of thoughts and emotions. I get the idea I think you were aiming for but it feels just a touch left off. simply an opinion though.
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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How cute! Short, simple, yet very powerful. I like it. It kind of has a bit of humor in here "What's the big problem" I don't know, but I liked it. Very nice. Thank you for entering, and good luck!
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Brilliant
I like this one alot. Its nice to see some happier and lighter poetry on here. You must love someone alot and I think most people are after that, that feeling where everything just falls into place. Brilliant, short but very sweet.
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