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tu melangeras l'air de nuages artificiels
tu te perdras dans des meandres filandreuses et intemporelles
tu trouveras le future incertain dans un present incompris
et tu vogueras loin,
loin d'ici

tu te laisseras pendre par les pieds a des arbres inexistants
tu croqueras de pleins gre a la pomme de tous les tourments
tu feras de tes nuits des pages blanches d'amnesie
et tu vogueras loin,
loin d'ici

tu briseras toutes les chaines que tu as dans le crane
tu prendras à rebours les langueurs océanes
tu viendras,tu verras,tu vaincreras et enfin de retour
tu revogueras loin,loin d'ici pour toujours...

Author notes

umm the translation's gonna be a bit late...
sorry about that

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    This contest is going to be hard to judge with all these breathtaking entries, your's amongst them, thank you, Josephine


  • Yorgo
    August 5, 2007

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    parfois on a juste besoin d'un peu de silence pour admirer tant de beaute...

    Chapeau mon ami!=)


  • psychokid
    July 3, 2007

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    oh man
    c'est juste formidable, impressionnant,
    ur the master of french poems, honestly, the way u use ur words,WOW!!!!!!!!!"tu vogueras loin",

    peace

  • LordSam
    May 15, 2007

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    listen pal, i was wondering what can ur poems be...but for real, i can't tell how amazingly i've enjoyed this one...


  • sommerregen
    April 27, 2007

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    Magnifique

    Ca m´impressionne... tes images sont tres expressives.
    ( I hope I didn´t make so many mistakes I learn French just as second foreign language )

    I enjoyed your strong, powerful and outstanding images !! Splendid poem.


  • XFaLLen-StarX
    April 4, 2007
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    comme un diamant tombé d'un coffret..

    me=*
    xxx


  • inspired torture
    April 2, 2007

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    Tu trouveras le futur incertain dans le present incompris.
    U reminded me of a french song named 'la lumiere de midi' with the rhym of ur piece. N ur use of 'tu' as if it concerns each human being. I just love it. Waiting for some more.
    P.S: waynak ma 3am menchoufak at uni? :-)


  • gothchyld
    March 30, 2007

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    Thanks for always taking care of your fellow french-illiterate family. Maybe I can help you with translation, once I master French that is. Can't applaud now because of my lack of French knowledge, and subsequent misintrepretation of your poem.


  • O b l i v i o n
    March 30, 2007

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    perfection? is the word for it?
    I guess perfection is understatement
    You amaze me serge!!
    I missed you so much! You and your words!!!
    Mwah!


    • sarajevo
      March 31, 2007
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      hana !! i miss you so much...thanks a lot for your comment u know how much your opinion means to me...where are you ?! how are you ?! how's everything ?


  • Apsinthion
    March 29, 2007

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    "tu te laisseras pendre par les pieds a des arbres inexistants
    tu croqueras de pleins gre a la pomme de tous les tourments
    tu feras de tes nuits des pages blanches d'amnesie
    et tu vogueras loin,
    loin d'ici"

    lol i practically copied half of it in here bass it really is great great and beyond great..

    and as i told u when i first read it, for some reason that i duno yet lol, the word "meandres" does stuff to me.. and i love it when u use it cuz u make it sound so perfect...

    this was.. wonderful

    ~rana~







  • N0sferatu
    March 29, 2007

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    I'm sorry amigo but i can't comment on that. It's just amazing. great piece.

    Elie

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