Please don’t stop the blood
From my suicidal rampage
Let me die in peace
I cut just deep enough
Red velvet spilling on the floor
Don’t make the attempt
I’m asking you to stop
Not asking to murder
Just let this suicide commence
Shut off the lights
Let in the dark
Gothic children of Adam and Eve
Don’t really know what darkness is
Feeling of hatred day in and out
What they do for attention
Causes kids like me
To feel it all
Outcast from the world so cold
Pain from the love of family
Worried stares and wild stories
Of bruises and cuts
So obvious of the secrets we hide
The sons of Adam
The daughters of Eve
Don’t know what its like for me
Feeling the cut
Inside my skin
Blood rushing out
My body freezing cold
The ecstasy of death is addictive
Taking in the feeling
Letting out the pain
Moments too soon it will be over
Death has come now
To take my shriveled body
To a place far away
Goodbye
A contest entry
- Please let me die i promise it wont hurt 3> by beautyamoungblades.
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An interesting poem, not exactly the style I love but still good. Anyway, the stanzas were a bit messy. The imagery was good, I liked the red velvet thing. Thank you for entering and good luck
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I'm really not into this kind of poetry, but I really liked the imagery you used in this poem and how you portrayed your hopelessness.
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Wow, such stunning imagery here. I'm not usually a fan of the whole cutting/self-injury thing, but I'm glad that you didn't glorify it, as many poets here do. Well done, and best of luck in the contest.
Laura x
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i loved the last full stanza, amazing job and good luck!
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This one is very good, good luck in the contest
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tghis was a really sad write and i can relate to this poem and understnad the feelings you wrote about keep writting your very talented
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i like this it is very good it really expresses te true feeling of suicide.Ive conteplated but alwayz goy stopped.I wish i didnt,
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i know these feelings
i understand all your feeling, i keep trying but people stop me, its not fair because i dont want to live anymore. i hope you have not done it, i am bookmarking this, its is great, it captures the truth, nothing like goths that think this is cool and its them depressed, they dont know the meaning of the word. great, well done!!
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im glad you liked no one has ever book marked me i feel so honored
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wow! nice poem gives me the chills
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